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"Every coin has two sides"; Effects of globalization - discuss


SreeSam 12 / 38 7  
Nov 26, 2013   #1
In the modern era, globalization has played a prominent role in everyone's life.
Just as the saying - "Every coin has two sides", globalization has brought both positive as well as bad effects to the human kind and we will discuss on the same.

Nobody can deny that acquiring knowledge with the help of modern technology is amazing and fantastic. Being at home, we are capable of knowing the happenings around the world. There are many advancements like online shopping, commodity trading, chatting with friends in various countries, etc., Students of modern era are blessed with the Internet where they can find profound learning through texts, audios and video sessions/courses/tutorials.

On the other hand, there are few disadvantages because of globalization. People are turning to be lazy most of the times since we are able to find everything sitting in front of computers. Long hours are wasted over mobile phone, video gaming and chatting unnecessarily.Quality time spent with the family is also reduced due the above said factors. Importantly students are affected the most because of over exposure to the world. For example, I had a neighbour who pampered his child with all the modern gadgets and the kid spent most of his time playing internet games and watching unwanted movies which spoiled his career in studies.

Having said all these, to conclude there will always be advancements in technology and increase in globalization every year. It is how an individual perceives it and acts taking only the good things from the change.

mingming 2 / 5 1  
Nov 26, 2013   #2
In my opinion your view about globalization is a little narrow which just focus on internet. You'd better add other aspects about globalization.
OP SreeSam 12 / 38 7  
Nov 27, 2013   #3
Sure will do that . thank you :)
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Nov 27, 2013   #4
First, I have an admin request for you - Please open IELTS essays in Writing Feedback forum. This one I moved from Essay/Term papers.

Just as the saying - "Every coin has two sides", globalization has brought both positive as well as bad effects to the human kind and we will discuss on the same.

You need to improve the structure of your introduction - I provided you a framework in your other essay.
It seems you can write well and if you pay more attention to your essay structure, you can surely go for a very good score :)
sri_1 5 / 8 5  
Nov 27, 2013   #5
good essay.
on the drawbacks of globalisation, i think there are much more beyond internet and gadget.
It was more like drawback of internet than drawback of globalisation.

Good luck!
OP SreeSam 12 / 38 7  
Nov 28, 2013   #6
Thanks dumi . Am trying to improve on my intro .. will take care
mika1998 4 / 13 3  
Nov 28, 2013   #7
at first i guess some words need to be replaced. also you had better talk about other effects of globalization, not only Internet but also economic impacts,etc. and also instead of " there are few disadvantages because of globalization." you had better said:globalization has also some disadvantages, and instead of "Having said all these"you could say : having mentioned both sides/pros and cons of globalization,.

after that in the same line as you mean the whole time you shouldn't bring it plural.
good luck:)


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