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College and university fees. The tuition in tertiary education is a controversial topic.


Thanh Hien 2 / 1  
Jul 6, 2018   #1

COLLEGE AND UNIVERSITY FEES



*Topic: In some countries, students have to pay their own college and university fees while in others, government pays. Do the advantages of government spending their money on college and university fees for students outweigh the disadvantages?

The tuition in tertiary education is a controversial topic. While some people say that it is advantageous if governments pay university fees, I am in favor of the idea that students have to pay on their own.

There are several reasons why it is thought to be more beneficial when tuition is paid by governments. Firstly, this may reduce the economic burden on families and students. People earning low incomes might be afraid of education fees; however, with the support of governments, their children have more opportunities to expand their knowledge and to be more skilled. Secondly, the equality between the poor and the rich is enhanced since everyone can study in colleges and universities for free. For this reason, the literacy standard may increase as well as we might have a more well-educated public.

On the other hand, it seems to me that governments should not spend money on students' tuition for some following reasons. To begin, the government's budget might be reduced, and its investment on improving infrastructure, products and other fields declines. As a consequence, tax rises significantly whereas living standards can decrease, leading to a slow development of the economy. Furthermore, if university fees are free, students tend to be less respectful. They may not appreciate the value of money spent by the government. Therefore, perhaps not all of them attend classes frequently, resulting in low quality education.

In conclusion, there are various conflicting views about whether the government should pay tuition for college and university students. Nevertheless, I am convinced that its drawbacks outweigh its benefits.

thuhuyen461 5 / 6 4  
Jul 6, 2018   #2
... to pay it on their own.

... reduce the economic financial burden ...
People earning having low ... afraid of paying education fees

.., the literacy standard rate may increase rise as well as ... well-educated public society.
Holt - / 7,528 2001  
Jul 7, 2018   #3
Thanh, there is a mistake in your interpretation of the prompt. You are being asked to reason out as to whether there are advantages to having the government spend on college and university fees over the disadvantages of the same. Look at the reason why your prompt paraphrase is incorrect based on the outline of the discussion below:

Original Question: Do the advantages of government spending their money on college and university fees for students outweigh the disadvantages?

Your Response: I am in favor of the idea that students have to pay on their own.

The response that you developed is not in line with the original prompt response instructions. The keywords that need to be read in your response should pertain to: government spending money, college and university fees, advantage, disadvantage. These keywords must be paraphrased in your response. Instead, you changed the prompt discussion by saying you are in favor of having students pay their own fees. You are no longer discussing the correct prompt topic and instructions in this instance.

Rather than discussing and advantage / disadvantage essay, your actual presentation is a comparison essay instead, which does not carry the same discussion points as the former essay type. In a comparison essay, you do not have to take sides in the essay presentation. In an advantage/disadvantage discussion, you should discuss both sides but, you must pick a side to support in order to present the implied personal opinion as the 3rd body paragraph in the essay. This creates a more prompt adherent response.


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