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Communication skills and your performance at a work place


Hujjatul19 45 / 70 3  
Sep 28, 2016   #1
The table below gives the results of two surveys, in 1997 and 2006, in which people were asked which communication skills were essential in their jobs.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.


The table presented illustrates the percentage of two conducted surveys in 1997 and 2006 about the significant level of communication skills in work place. The skills are grouped into external communication and internal communication. At a glance, it can be seen obviously that both of trends witnessed a dramatical increase.

The data shows that internal communication skills saw a considerable rise to 10 percent in instructing or training people. Then, persuading or influencing others skill went up to 21% from 16%. Moreover, the ability of making speeches or presentations climbed by 4 percent. The next three skills; analysing problems together with others, planning the activities of others and listening carefully to colleagues as well experienced an increase of 6%, 1%, and 9% respectively.

Furthermore, the other communication skills (external communication skills) have no significant difference in its change. All of the external communication skills improved unless the ability to sell a product or service. The latter skill dipped by 3%. Meanwhile, knowledge of particular products or services and advising or caring for cutomers or clients and dealing with people witnessed a rise of 6%, 3%, and 5% respectively.




ichanpants89 [Contributor] 16 / 777 309  
Sep 28, 2016   #2
Hi Husnul,

Here's my contributions towards your report summary of IELTS task 1. I hope you can follow through.

1st paragraph:
- The table presentedpresented table illustrates the percentage of two conducted surveystwo surveys about the significant level of communication skills in work place that had been conductedinbetween 1997 and 2006 about the significant level of communication skills in work place.

- At a glanceAt glance / Overall , it can be seen obviously(if you combine "seen" and "obviously", it would make it redundant. Something that can be "seen" is ALWAYS something that OBVIOUS.) that both of trends witnessed a dramatical increase.

2nd paragraph:
- The next three skills; analysing problems together with others... (avoid making a sentence that is considered as "shop-listing" like this one. Writing more than two data in a single sentence would ruin the final grade of your essay.)

As seen, I did alter some of your sentences in order to improve the quality of your essay. Therefore, I hope the next practice would be better than this one. Do not hesitate to ask if you need further assistance. Good luck :)


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