Hello Nuraini, I have some suggestion for you
have made their own ...
... that those companies
should take people ...
... can help companies
in certain condition
Some pressures in worksite
You see in your first paragraph you do repetition for the world 'COMPANIES'.
There are some synonym that can be used for replacing company:
INDUSTRY / ENTERPRISES / CORPORATION / FIRM are likely to be used in your passage
Meanwhile, others believe that PEOPLE WHO / SOMEONE WHO(subject is needed here)
able to work in a team ...
You miss the subject
both of criterion
have to beMUST BE had by employees
Try to make it more effective.
Some pressures in
worksiteWORKPLACE make the employees
Worksite ---> I can't find it in Cambridge. maybe you mean workplace (C1) word !!!REPETITION
: EMPLOYEES : 7 TIMES
I count your word "employees" and you make repetition until 7 times. Please AVOID this !
You can change with synonym :OCCUPANTS / WORKERS / LABOUR
... not enough for developing
I believe that when
aTHE company get larger
You are already mentioned before, so business is refer to your industry, use "THE" as the article.