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Companies have made their own standard for recruiting employees.


nurainiyusuf16 47 / 83 6  
Nov 30, 2016   #1
Some people think when recruiting, companies should aim to take on people who are innovative and able to work independently while others considered they should recruit people who are able to work in a team and follow instructions. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, companies have made their own standard for recruiting the employees. Some people argue that those companies should take people who have self-contained and innovative. Meanwhile, others believe that able to work in a team and follow the instructions are more important. As far as I concern, both of criterion have to be had by employees but it has to appropriate with their job desk. This essay will first discuss about how innovative and independent people can help companies in certain condition, and then talk how work in a team and obedience of employees are useful.

Some pressures in worksite make the employees have to be innovative and able to work independently. When it comes to deadline and recessive condition, the worker are instructed to do something by their selves since other employees have to finish their task, but in the same time, they are still expected for resulting creative products. A study from psychological industry, stated that workers who independent and innovative can help their company in shrink condition. So, it is really important to have them in a company.

However, employees who able to work in a team and adherence are also have a merit. Taking a theory from Industrial Relationship, it stated that innovative is not enough for developing a business. I believe that when a company get larger, it will lead them to bigger goal, and for making it happen, it is impossible to be done by one person. At this time, companies need workers who able to follow the company's instructions and able to work in a team.

To conclude, either innovative and independent or team worker and obedience, all of those employees' characteristic is needed for developing the company. It just depends on the worker job desk.

faizunaa17 49 / 91  
Nov 30, 2016   #2
Hello Nuraini, I have some suggestion for you

Nowadays, companies have made their own ...
... that those companies should take people ...
... can help companies in certain condition

Some pressures in worksite

You see in your first paragraph you do repetition for the world 'COMPANIES'.
There are some synonym that can be used for replacing company:

INDUSTRY / ENTERPRISES / CORPORATION / FIRM are likely to be used in your passage

Meanwhile, others believe that PEOPLE WHO / SOMEONE WHO(subject is needed here) able to work in a team ...
You miss the subject

both of criterion have to beMUST BE had by employees

Try to make it more effective.

Some pressures in worksiteWORKPLACE make the employees

Worksite ---> I can't find it in Cambridge. maybe you mean workplace (C1) word !!!

REPETITION : EMPLOYEES : 7 TIMES

I count your word "employees" and you make repetition until 7 times. Please AVOID this !
You can change with synonym :

OCCUPANTS / WORKERS / LABOUR

... not enough for developing aTHE business

I believe that when aTHE company get larger

You are already mentioned before, so business is refer to your industry, use "THE" as the article.
MufliHamid - / 21 7  
Nov 30, 2016   #3
Meanwhile, others believe that BE able to work in a team ...
As far as I AM concernED, both of criterion have to be had OWNED by employees but it has to BE appropriate with their job desk DESCRIPTION.

the worker are instructed to do something by their selves since..
PLEASE AVOID THE USAGE OF WORD 'SOMETHING' IN YOUR ESSAY, IT HAS TO BE SIMPLIFIED BY THE EXACT WORD, IN THIS CASE, 'WORK' WOULD BE A BETTER WORD FOR ALTERING IT.

ALSO, 'THEIR SELVES' IS NOT AN APPROPRIATE WORD TO BE USED SINCE IT HAS NO MEANING. "THEMSELVES" IS THE CORRECT ONE.


stated that workers who ARE independent and (...) company in shrinkING condition

However, employees who ARE able to work in a team and adherence are also have a merit
REMEMBER, THE USAGE OF WORD ABLE. YOU NEED TO PUT BE (AM, IS, ARE, WAS, WERE) BEFORE COMING TO THE WORD 'ABLE'.

Taking a theory from Industrial Relationship AS A PERFECT EXAMPLE ,

companies need workers who ARE able to follow the compaNY
yurikeyuri 43 / 61 2  
Nov 30, 2016   #4
Hello, let me give my correction for you

This essay will first discuss aboutfirstly, the essay will discuss that how innovative...

...companies in the certain condition...

the worker areis instructed to do something ("worker" is singular subject)

workers who are independent and innovative

employees who are able to work in a team and adherence are which also have a merit

it stated that innovativeinnovative skill is not enough for developing a business

I believe that when a company getgets larger

thank you


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