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'only a few companies could stick out over 5 years' - WHAT MAKES SMALL BUSINESS SUCCESSFUL ?


rosadesiana 38 / 40 2  
Aug 26, 2016   #1
SUMMARY TASK 4
What makes small business successful ?

Small business described as a small company where there is no more 500 persons or even less work there. There are a bunch of small company registered every year, but less than 50% who survive until the second year. And only a fewer companies could stick out over 5 years. It is not easy to be in the track and compete with the firms who have been running longer. but if the company has a unique character and capable to find a niche also offers customers personalized service, it is not possible if the company will stay ahead of the game. Distribution system, excellence customer service, better location are couple of tricks to struggle within the competitors beside of the basic steps in setting up a small business such as research, sound business plan, project the cash flow etc.

constructive criticisms are very welcome :)

akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Aug 26, 2016   #2
Hi Rosa..
These are my corrections. Make you sure that you deal with them.


There are a bunch of small company IES WHICH registered every year, but less than 50% who WHICH (You discuss the owner of company?) survive until the second year. And only HOWEVER (Here is a proper linking word to make this smoother when readers move from a sentence to another sentence), a fewer companies ...

It is not easy to be in ON the track and compete with the firms who WHICH (WHO refers to PEOPLE, and WHICH to GROUPS OR THINGS) have been running longer. but NEVERTHELESS, if the company has a unique character and capable to find OF FINDING a niche also offers ...

... better location are A couple of tricks to struggle within the competitors beside APART FROM the basic steps in ...

Please, you harness the linking words appropriately so that your topic does not jump. One of essential elements is the meaning of your sentences. Check more to ensure what you write is what you mind.

Good Luck
swr10 10 / 16 2  
Aug 29, 2016   #3
... but less than 50%percentwhowhich survive until the second year. AndHowever, only a fewer companies could stick out over 5five years.
bB ut if the company has a ...
... excellence customer service and better location are the couple (...) project the cash flow and etc.
Fadhilahumar91 61 / 73 6  
Aug 29, 2016   #4
hi...

Small business described as a small companycompanies where there is no more ...
... but less than 50% whowhich survive until the second year.
.... but if the company has a unique character ...
... excellence customer service, better(using better it means you compared with others for ex, better than) location are couple of tricks ...
Faridadwi18 67 / 104 13  
Aug 29, 2016   #5
Hi rosa,

- Small business described as a small companycompanies where there is ...
- There are a bunch of small companyies
- And only a fewer companies could stick out ...
- It is not easy to be in theon track
- ... service, better location are coupletheof tricks to struggle

Hopefully it helps.
Dipa19 8 / 13  
Aug 29, 2016   #6
Hii rosa, this is my suggest

1. (Don't forget to distinguish between passive and active, use the correct rule)
Small business (is described) as a small company (...) or even less (working) there.

2. A bunch=alot=many=much, dll= more than one (ot can be accountable and unaccountable)
There are a bunch of small (companies) (register) every year, but less than 50% (which/that) survive until the second year.

3. (Which, who, that, whom, etc= relative pronoun= find out the functions!)

4. (subject+verb agreement) and= is not subject. Please put the appropriate subject in the beginning of sentence. Don't use "and" !
And only (a few) companies could stick out over 5 years.
It better like this: "However, there are only a few companies (that could stick out) over 5 years".


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