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IELTS:Should company use public recognition to reward hard working, not to use money.

colin 23 / 48 15  
Jan 1, 2013   #1
Should company use public recognition to reward hard working, not to use money.

Incentives mechanism is a complex way of motivation, which can determine the success of organizations. While I accept that rewards and recognition can energize workers, I believe that remunerative incentives would be more effective.

On the one hand, recognition can motivate employees. Firstly, all human have a need to feel valued and respected. According to Maslow's hierarchy of needs, if people get respect from others, they will feel a sense of achievement. That is why so many graduates intend to engage in professions such as working in a law firm or being a doctor. For workers, earning great reputation means that their achievements have recognized, which can greatly enhance job satisfaction. In addition, people tend to be confident in working when they receive recognition and appreciation from the outside world. Employees will be certain that what they do is right and that the firm needs their contributions.

However, I would argue that financial incentives would be more popular among employees. From a realistic perspective, money is a tool for maintaining a basic standard of living. Without money, we are unable to buy food, afford the mortgages and pay for health care expenses. Furthermore, we tend to connect material possessions with happiness and success. Most of people aspire to earn more money because they want to own bigger houses and more luxurious automobiles. For example, many bankers like wearing the Armani suit, living in the Manhattan's Upper East Side and driving the BMW car. This is because material wealth are status symbols. Lastly, money provides a unit of account that serves as a standard to measure value. We have seen that the most direct measure of employees' contribution is the money they make for themselves.

In conclusion, it seems that compared with public recognition, the monetary incentive is more effective measure to motivate employees because it is a more realistic method to incentive workers who need more money in exchange for the necessity, to enjoy a better life and measure their contributions to the organization.

salmav 8 / 27 4  
Jan 2, 2013   #2
you can replace the word "lastly" by "last but not least", it would brings you higher score. Anw, your essay is pretty good in general :)
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Jan 6, 2013   #3
You are very good with your writing skills. I notice excellent sentences, vocabulary and grammar. However, I wish if you had given more specific examples to support your reasons. In this task, they expect you to include very specific examples. In your first body para, I do not find such specific examples. The banker's example in the second body para is fine. Absence of examples, it seems that you have not adequately backed your opinion.

Overall, it's a very good essay!
joythblessy 86 / 272 15  
Jan 6, 2013   #4
Hai colin...

I skipped your essay...(.

As usual very good..

i like your conclusion. However, it is a lo...ng sentance. One sentance..one para,(conclusion).

Please cut it into short sentances if possible..
All the best..

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