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the compare and contrast between A and B Ice Cream


cnancysr 1 / -  
Dec 7, 2012   #1
i'm still worried about my grammar, with the clearing and is it coherans or not. and i also still confused what should i write in conclusion? and sorry if im sensor the brand of the ice cream and the city.

thanks before for your helping. it is my pleasure if somebody can help me
the compare and contrast between A and B Ice Cream

In the big city like X, there are a lot of competitions among ice cream companies. They always want to create different ice cream so that many consumers are interested in their product. In general, day by day the corporation always gives and creates the new innovation to make consumers more satisfied and enjoy eating their Ice cream. Besides that the corporations also to make their product of ice cream become a popular ice cream in X. In particular, there is a popular ice cream in X that has a unique specification in their ice cream. That ice cream is A and B. They have their own lovers and become a popular ice cream in X because a lot of consumer, but they also have differences in term of specification. The two types of ice cream that have similarities and differences and it can be the compare and contrast between A and B ice cream.

Firstly, the similarity between A and B ice cream can be seen from the number of consumers so the effect is A and B ice cream becoming the popular ice cream in X. A and B are can be appropriated if eating them on summer and they are easier to be a snack or dessert. Not only can be a snack or dessert but also they have a strong characteristic taste and many kinds of variant flavor. It makes A and B ice cream have many lovers, especially kids in X and also all over the world. Not only among the kids like eating A and B ice cream but also the teenagers and adulthood like eating them. Some writer in the AXYB info state that it's still hard to dislike A and B ice cream until in these days (I scream for ice cream, 2011).

Secondly, the contrast between A and B ice cream can be seen from some specifications. The specification of the contrast is such as the packaging, the texture of ice cream and the price between A and B ice cream. In the first contrast is the price between A and B ice cream. If B ice cream is around one hundred yen for one packs, A is more expensive than B, the prices of A is around one hundred twenty nine yen. The second contrast is the packaging, A have a unique packaging because the shape of A is like a bottle and have a handle in the top for opened it easy, so the consumers just snap it and enjoy eating. If A packaging is like a bottle and have a handle but B is like a candy because B have a smallest shape of ice cream and just covered with plastic or in new innovation, now B available for sale in packs and there is a stick to take the ice cream. After the price and packaging specification of contrast between A and B ice cream, now the third contrast is from the texture. The texture of A is ice block or ice blend like Chu-petto and the consumers can feel a fresh and smooth texture in the mouth. If B is like ice block or ice blend, but it differences with the texture of B. B ice cream has smoother and creamy texture more than A, because B from milk, honey and after that B coated with chocolate crust.

dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Dec 7, 2012   #2
there are a lot of competitions among ice cream companies.

... there is a lot of competition among ice cream companies

They always want to create different ice cream so that many consumers are interested in their product.

They try to differentiate their product by introducing new ice cream flavors that would attract consumers.

. Besides that the corporations also to make their product of ice cream become a popular ice cream in X.

This sentence tends to confuse the reader.... I cannot understand what you are trying to say :(
I think you need to re-do the first para.... It becoming more and more confusing as you proceed... I can help you with this one, if you explain what you are trying to mean by that : )


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