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COMPARE AND CONTRAST TECHNOLOGY NOW AND BEFORE


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Jul 8, 2014   #1
TOPIC: TECHNOLOGY HAS CHANGED THE WAY PEOPLE LIVED. WHAT ARE THE BENEFITS OF TECHNOLOGY TO HUMANITY? COMPARE AND CONTRAST TECHNOLOGY NOW AND BEFORE.

In this modern world, it is hard to imagine living without the aid of technology. Some people say that technology has changed the world by making ones life easier and fun. From time to time, there are new technologies invented that helps in making life easier for most people, from communication, transportation, and even to entertainment.

E-mails, cellphones, and internet are only few examples of technological improvements in communication. Back then, people were only able to send letters through mails, which we now call "snail mails", in order for them to send messages to their loved ones far away from home. In this modern era, we can now connect easily with our families and friends using cellphones and internet services by sending them messages through e-mail or SMS, which they are able to read and reply right away using these new inventions.

In addition, cars, light-railway-trains, and airplanes are some of the innovations in transportation made by technology. These modern transports allow us to travel comfortably and quickly to our destinations all over the world. In the old age, transportation were only limited to horses and ships that took them days before they arrive in their respective destinations. With these innovations on transportation, people are now able to visit different places throughout the world.

Moreover, the source of entertainment were limited to radios and poor quality movie played on theaters. Nowadays, people are able to listen to their favorite songs over and over again through their handy ipods and cellphones. Movies can now be viewed not only on theaters but also to our homes with high quality definitions, which make the scenes more real and entertaining.

To sum up, there are numerous benefits brought by technology in humanity. The incessant innovations made in technology seem to improve the lives of people in many different ways.

foteini - / 4 1  
Jul 8, 2014   #2
easier and fun: I think that instead of fun you should put an other word, such as more comfortable.
Instead of writing : From time to time, there are new technologies invented that helps in making life easier for most people, from communication, transportation, and even to entertainment. I think you should write : With the passing of the years technology becomes better and better ( and then you can write an example. For example you can compare one item that has become better in the passing of the years, such as a phone, a TV etc.)

E-mails, cellphones, and internet are only a few examples of technological improvements in communication.
Back then, people... : You should write Then,people...
Really good job... I really like your statement at the second paragraph. ;)
In the old age, transportation was*(was and not were) only limited to horses and ships that took them days before they arrive in their respective destinations. With these innovations on transportation, people are now able to visit different places throughout the world.

favorite -- favourite * the both are correct.
which make the scenes more real : here its better to use the word more realistic.
I really like your conclusion. :)
Finally, I can say that you have done a really nice work and your mistakes are really small.
Walk on like this..

Foteini.
Anh Nguyen 265 4 / 11 3  
Jul 9, 2014   #3
there are new technologies invented that helps

-> that help (plural form because of 'there are')

internet

-> the Internet

loved ones

I think 'beloved individuals' is more reasonable

we can now connect easily with our families and friends using cellphones and internet services

I am a little bit confused at this reduced relative clauses, and I think you should insert 'who' to make your sentence clear.

These modern transports

modern sorts of transport

but also to our homes

at our places

These are my ideas of correction. I hope they can help to improve your essay.

Anh Nguyen


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