the effects of parents and peers on youngsters
The discrepancies between the effects of parents and peers on teenagers is pronounced when it comes to school performance, and they deserve rigorous scrutiny. Firstly, it is noted that better academic performance in juveniles is directly attributed to parental support and stimulation. Dusek as cited by Gacia (2006), claimed that parents are likely to play the influential role in youngsters' stance regarding their education. That not only do parents stimulate an academic atmosphere at home but they also generally associate with their teachers is contributors of teenagers' high educational outcomes. (Dr. Bettina Joyce P. IIagan, 2013-2014). On the other hand, teens are increasingly prone to prioritize socializing with their friends rather than pay more attention in school work. According to Veronneau, Vitaro, Pedersen & Tremblay (2008), it is undeniable that the existence of the adolescent- uneducated friends bond is correlated with their academic failure. Another similar finding researched by Nelson and DeBacker (2008) points out that it poses a host of negative influences to children's school performance should they are as a part of poor quality peer group. ( Lisette T. Jacobson, MPA, MA, PhD(c) & Charles A. Burdsal, PhD).
Albeit with some superficial distinction, parents' influence on juveniles bear much resemblance to peers' in terms of personality in both positive and negative way. To begin with, examples of good behavior of parents and friends contribute to reinforce teenagers' well-being. Firstly, the role of parents in establishment of children's positive traits is highly significant. In the view of Doug Hewitt, Children tend to perceive their parents as the basis for behavior to emulate. Therefore, it is of importance for parents to display good manners in life. Moreover, the close connection between teens and parents stimulate the feeling of both respectful and being respected, which may prevent them from the emotional issue including disgrace, resentment and discomfiture. In the same way, peers, as cited by Kwame S. Sakyi,1 Pamela J. Surkan,1 Eric Fombonne,2 Chollet,3,4 and Maria Melchior (2014), make substantial contribution to improve adolescents' socializing skills. The consequence of socialization brought about by the relatedness to friends group promote a sense of importance, confidence as well as cordiality in teens, which is supposed to mediate the problematic issue in a child's cognitive development.@hoanglinh0510
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