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IELTS task 1 - comparing three types of food prices

juhuihjijuh 3 / 8  
Jan 21, 2020   #1

various food products and their price index

Hello every one
This is the first time I do this type of line graph that compares the items with price index. I hope you can tell me whether I have created a correct link between the foods and the price index.

The line graph illustrates how the price of fresh fruits and vegetable, sugar and sweets and carbonated drinks changes from 1979 to 2009. Overall, the price of all the tree foods changed over the period, but fresh fruits and vegetables' value is remarkable.

In 1979, the prices of fresh fruits and vegetable, sugar and sweets and carbonated drinks were around 65. From the beginning of the period to 1981 all the foods showed a steady rise and got stuck in around 80. From 1981 on, both sugar and sweets and carbonated drinks experienced some fluctuations by being higher and lower than 100 and then it followed by a constant rise the rest of the time to be almost 200 and 2010 by 2009.

Fresh fruits and vegetables price underwent a calm growth from the beginning of the period to 1983. From 1983 to 2009 it experienced some ups and downs but

continued climbing and stopped at nearly 335 in 2009 which is the highest among all the three types of food.

guyucguy 1 / 4 1  
Jan 22, 2020   #2
Overall, you were able to clearly explain what is happening to the foods shown on the graph, but what about the consumer-price index. Some questions I have are what currency are you using to describe the prices of the foods, as well as why did the fresh fruits and vegetables grow so much more than the rest?

"the price of all the treethree foods changed"
"and then it is followed by a constant rise"
jtjt99 2 / 2 1  
Jan 22, 2020   #3
Overall, there is clear analysis of the trend between food products and price. However, you have mainly focused on fresh fruits and vegetables. It would be better if you were to add a comparison between the other food groups. Such as that the gap between the consumer price index and fresh fruits and vegatables (the highest) and carbonated drinks (the lowest).

May I ask if there is a prompt?
OP juhuihjijuh 3 / 8  
Jan 22, 2020   #4
Thanks a lot
I will take what you said into consideration. But, could you please tell me how to make a link between the consumer-price index and the foods? Is the food under the index price line means it reduced in price and the ones above the line became higher in price? It is just like a nightmare to me. I hope you can show me the correct link between the price and and the foods.
RezaAnandatama17 8 / 14 3  
Jan 23, 2020   #5
Hii there, what a nice writing! im here to give some input. First, not sure but I cannot find the measurement of the figure number, are they using the true number or those number represents some value, like percentage or in thousand--better decribe it. second, it may be little confusing but im assuming that if the price getting higher means it is being more expensive as well
Holt [Contributor] - / 7,888 2167  
Jan 25, 2020   #6
Try to vary your sentence presentation by adding time measurement references. For example, instead of simply saying "from 1979-2009", one could instead say "representing 3 decades from 1979 up to 2009". Adding a little complexity to the sentence and showing a competency in using more advanced English language (in reference to time frames) can easily boost your LR and GRA scores. There is also an incomplete thought presentation in the trending statement of the first paragraph. What was remarkable about the figures presented? 65 what? Value representations are important to your TA and GRA scores. Oversights such as those could adversely affect your TA score in the actual setting. Please post the instruction discussions for your essay next time. It is difficult to give you a full review of your work without it.
johnle29 4 / 9  
Jan 31, 2020   #7
I suggest you should add one more point in your overview. Fore example, you can say "... Also, fresh fruits and vegetables registered the highest food price index over most of the time frame"
thaolinh 2 / 6 2  
Feb 5, 2020   #8
You should try some advance phrase to boost your LR score. For example, in the ovrall part, instead of saying changed over the perioud, you can use " experience an upward trend "

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