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Comparison of children born by women in age from 40 to 44 in Australia


pujakurniawan19 9 / 16 4  
Jun 18, 2016   #1
The table graph shows the gathered statistics about children who are born by the women from 40 to 44 years old. The data is taken from four different years (1981, 1986, and 2006) in Australia.

Overall, by age 40-44 years, the percentage of women having four or more children had significant downward trend since 1981 to 2006. However, the proportion who have had one child and two children or not at all was reverse.

The proportion of women who have had just one child was the lowest, while they who have had two children were the highest in Australia since 1980s to 2006. The percentage of amount of children who was born by woman aged 40-44 years old was identical relatively. The highest change happened in 1986 in the women who have had one or none child at all that were 8.7% to 11.3% and 9.7% to 12.8% respectively in during a century.




kurniarahmi 6 / 5 1  
Jun 18, 2016   #2
Hi Puja :) it seems you forgot to add 1996 in last sentence. I think you should be carefull in write.

... four different years (1981, 1986, 1996 and 2006) in Australia.

However, the proportion who have had one child and two childrenchild or not at all was reverse.
justivy03 - / 2,366 607  
Jun 21, 2016   #3
Hi Puja, here's another one from my end.

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There you have it Puja, for future writing reference, mind the logic of your sentences, an example is when you mentioned "children born by women", but of course, only women can bear children isn't it. This kinds of sentences can affect the overall idea of your essay.


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