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Task 1 IELTS: the comparison of common advantages and disadvantages of Fairmont Island


tria25 12 / 19 4  
May 1, 2016   #1
The most common benefits and drawbacks of Fairmont Island based on survey of visitors are compared on the pie charts. The negative impacts are classified into weather, high cost of living, entertainment, and food quality, while the positive impacts are categorized into the people, the scenery, good accommodation, and culture. Overall, it is immediately apparent that the biggest percentage of the people visited supports the high cost of living category become the worst problem of visitors in this island.

To begin with, the Fairmont Island attracts many people to come to visit it until it causes the high cost of living becomes the biggest common problem at virtually 40% and 45% respectively. Furthermore, the smallest disadvantage described by the food quality stood at one in twenty fraction, whereas the lowest category in advantage chart seen in good accommodation category takes a fifth fraction.

Moreover, the benefit received by the visitors in terms of the scenery shows nearly the same percentage with the people category. Even though weather problem is illustrated a fifth of fraction, the number of visitors enjoying the scenery is still in the average percentage. However, the big drawback of entertainment influences the percentage of culture taking a minority number of advantages.




justivy03 - / 2,367 607  
May 1, 2016   #2
HI Nurtria, I would like to share my thoughts on your essay, please find my remarks below.

- i n the pie charts.
- the people, the scenery,
- of the people visitedvisitors supporting the high cost
- of living category beca me the worst problem of visitors in this island.

- to come to visit,it until
- it caused the rise of living commoditiesthe high cost of living becomes the biggest common problem
- advantage chart is seen in the good accommodation
- category that takes a fifth of the fraction.

- illustrated at a fifth of fraction,
- entertainment influenced the percentage

There you have it Nurtria, I hope I was able to help you out on this analysis and when it comes to the score, I will base it upon the usage of the language and I will rate this essay at 6, it's because there are still a lot of improvements to be done and I hope you follow through and practice the language as often as you can.


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