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The comparison of the figure of four electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework


Feb 13, 2022   #1

the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of the time spent doing housework



The line graphs provide the comparison of the figure of four electrical appliances in a given country and amount of time spent doing housework in households over the period of 99 years.

From an overall perspective, it is evident that the proportion of electrical appliances used has sharply increased from 1920 to 2019. However, the amount of time spent doing housework in households showed a significant decline.

In 1920, the percentage of households with electrical appliances was quite low, especially the refrigerator, at 0%. The figure for using washing machines and vaccum cleaners was higher, at percisely 40% and 30%. Meanwhile, the proportion of time that families in the country spent doing housework per week was far high which stood at 50 hours.

In the period from 1920 to 2012, the usage of refrigerator and vacuum cleaner rose dramatically to a peak of 100% and then stayed at that level. The percentage of households with washing machines started high at 40%, it also increased but reached just about 75% in 2012. By the contrast, the number of hours of housework has decreased suddenly and fell to approximately 10 hours per week in 2012.



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Feb 14, 2022   #2
in a given country

This information is not specified in the images provided. The writer will lose points for not accurately restating the contents of the images. The writer is not allowed to add information to the summary just because he thinks it will make the writing more interesting / accurate. He is not to include information that cannot be verified by the image. Doing so will result in percentage point deductions in relation to the summary overview and task accuracy considerations.

over the period of 99 years

While this is another way of mentioning the indicated time frame, it is not acceptable in the summary section. The summary should contain precise and accurate references to the original information. Hence, only the year range should be mentioned. An alternative year representation is better used in the body paragraphs. Or, the year indicator should have been mentioned in a parenthesis for accuracy.

The rest of the presentation is accurate enough and will receive decent marks. However, the two major deduction areas will lower the overall score. While the essay will not fail, it may only receive a base passing mark. Avoid the errors indicated next time.


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