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A comparison of residents rate in three different areas of Oregon from 1940 to 2000 - the line chart


pikul 23 / 26 3  
Jan 19, 2016   #1
A breakdown of population rate in three different areas of Oregon from 1940 to 2000 is shown in line chart. Overall, more people lived in Washington. Therefore, population rate had a similar trend for all countries.

Initially, the number of population rose during the 60 years and reached the maximum level in 2000, but Washington's population always came first among other countries. There was a significant gap in Washington compared to Yamhill and Columbia in 1940 with a gap of approximately twice as much and it had widened to over 160,000 in 2000 due to significant increase in the number of people in Washington.

At more detailed look at the graph reveals that the difference was less marked 1940, with just over 25,000 and 30,000 people live in Columbia and Yamhill respectively, while population in Washington was in number 75,000. Additionally, for the next 30 years, experienced slightly increase in the number of population in three areas. By 2000, a significant growth in Washington's population reached a peak at over 240,000, while the others had fairly similar population with Washington at the beginning of the period.




vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Jan 19, 2016   #2
You need to concentrate on developing your thought process in a manner that will best reflect the information in the chart provided. There is a need for you to learn how to properly use connecting words as well. More importantly, you need to know the difference between a country and a county. A county is a division within the state or province of a country. You cannot confuse it with a country.

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... the number RATE of population rose during the OVER 60 years and reached the A maximum level ... among other countries COUNTIES. ...

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- Actual figures please.

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eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Jan 19, 2016   #3
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... while population in Washington was in number REACHED 75,000.
... THIS experienced A slightly increase in the number of TOTAL population in three areas.
... By 2000, a significant growth in Washington's population HAD reached a peak at over 240,000, while the others had A fairly similar RATE OF population
Febri91 5 / 6 2  
Jan 19, 2016   #4
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