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IELTS 1;comparisons where relevant to bulid new mall in the city of Brandfield .


Eva Novita Sari 47 / 71 2  
Apr 13, 2014   #1
Question:
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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Answer:

The map shows a drawing of the city of Brandfield. The goverments of this city have planned to build a new shopping mall for two possible sites. These are in the north and the south east of the town.

In general, both of two areas are crossed by river, road and railway.

The first possible location is in the suburb. This location is nearer with housing estate in secondary by river, railway, and road. This place for shoping mall 1 (S1) where far distance from industry. With the result, air polution from many industries are not disturb people that come to S1.

However, the second possible site is totally different than the first one. It is located S2 near city center. Although, this place near railway, but it is one strip compared by S1 in a place over the railway which many people should through railway and this is very dangerous for each persons especially for children. So, place plan S2 is not dangerous because society should not over the railway.

In short, the second possible is more perfectly because its place more safe than one location.




upinipin 32 / 49 1  
Apr 13, 2014   #2
each persons

each + sing noun
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Apr 14, 2014   #3
In general, both of two areas are crossed by river, road and railway.

I have noticed that you have the habit of using "both" and "two" together. Since they both have the same meaning one makes the other word redundant.

eddies has given some good notes in another thread (follow the link below) and hope it is useful for you;
https://essayforum.com/writing/hawaiian-island-chain-center-pacific-ocean-56922/

Although, this place is near the railway, but it is one strip compared byto S1 which is located abovein a place over the railway whichthat many people should through railway and this is very dangerous for each persons especially for children.

This sentence is way too long for the reader to memorize every detail you say in that. You also need to pay attention to grammar a lot!


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