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competition vs. cooperation - none of them can work in isolation


sparwani 1 / 1  
Dec 23, 2011   #1
Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taugh to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

"Competition" or "cooperation" are two important methods of learning for everyone, especially for children. There are differences of opinion on which method should be preferred for effective learning, to become more useful for own self and society. Sometimes, it also varies from society to society, that which culture should be promoted as Japanese are more like "cooperation base" while American are more "competition oriented".

Competition provides an opportunity to do better than colleagues or peers, which, promotes creativity and innovative thinking amongst them. But it also develops a sense of fight or bringing down someone and lees due weight to someone's ideas. In my country, where more schools are promoting sense of competition which in turn is reducing the ability of cooperate during jobs.

While on the other hand, modern management gurus say that cooperation at an early stage of education promotes team work in future. Cooperation develops the ability to make compromises in, which may not be suitable to all situations.

In my opinion, none of them cannot work in isolation. So, it would be advisable to find a fit between both, as competition is important for Innovative and creative thinking, while, cooperation is necessary for team work, both are necessary for the upbringing of children.

Essay for IELTS....Your valueable feedback would be appreciated.

HEast22 3 / 6  
Dec 24, 2011   #2
watch your grammar... I tried to go through it and point out some areas that could use some work. You have good ideas, just make the sentences flow better and remember to use the right conjunctions and comma usage. Also remember that there has to be a subject in a sentence. To explain, "it" is not clear when starting a sentence most of the time, so ask yourself, "what is 'it'"

Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taugh to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

"Competition" or and "cooperation" are two important methods of learning for everyone, especially for children. There are differences of opinion on which method should be preferred for effective learning, to become more useful for own self and societymissing subject (ie who or what becomes more useful) . Sometimes, it methods? what is it also varies from society to society, that which? culture should be promoted. For example, as Japanese are more like "cooperation base" while American are more "competition oriented".

Competition provides an opportunity to do better than colleagues or peers, which, get rid of comma promotes creativity and innovative thinking amongst them. But it also develops a sense of fight or bringing down someone and lees due weight to someone's ideas. In my country, where more schools are promoting a sense of competition, which is in turn is reducing the ability of cooperate during jobs.

While on the other hand, modern management gurus say that cooperation at an early stage of education promotes team work in future. Cooperation develops the ability to make compromises in, which may not be suitable to all situations.

In my opinion, none of them cannot work in isolation. So, it would be advisable to find a fit between both, as competition is important for i nnovative and creative thinking, while, cooperation is necessary for team work, and both are necessary for the upbringing of children.
OP sparwani 1 / 1  
Dec 26, 2011   #3
thanx dear for valuable feedback and this will sure help me to overcome my mistakes.


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