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IELTS - Compulsory voluntary work is a contradiction, and not only in a literal way


Burguete 1 / -  
Jul 27, 2014   #1
Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers (for example working for charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children).

To what extent do you agree with this opinion?


I don't agree with this opinion in any way. Compulsory voluntary work is a contradiction, and not only in a literal way.

On one hand, the purpose of community service or any form of voluntary work is a question still up for debate. It's the primer goal to help those who are being aided or to enrich personally the volunteers? Why is this relevant? The warmglow effect that results from helping someone wouldn't be present if this help was "compulsory". Children would see this work as any other obligation, a way to keep them apart from the fun stuff they enjoy. The purpose of volunteer work would be lost at least in half.

I've said "at least" because making these services mandatory could even affect the other half of the purpose of volunteer work. The warm glow effect, as cynical as it is, explains why so many people are regular volunteers: they feel good about themselves. However, someone who sees this work as an obligation, as I've pointed out, won't be so motivated, and this could affect the result of their work. I can find one example of this in my personal life: in the past year I helped to fund a pro bono association, who provides legal aid to the poor. We had many great volunteers who helped us starting the association, and one whowas forced, in order to have access to a scholarship. He was the only one that let us down, never attending the meating or returning our calls, simply because he wasn't interested.

Helping those who need is a mantra that everyone should follow, and charities are always lacking hands. However, 2 + 2 isn't always 4, and in this case, joining the supply with the demand, in my opinion would have a negative outcome.

fikri 5 / 317 71  
Jul 28, 2014   #2
I don't agree with this opinion in any way. Compulsory voluntary work is a contradiction, and not only in a literal way.

this intro is too short,,

If you want to write a balanced answer for an "agree or disagree" question, it's important to get the introduction right.
msarkar 8 / 15  
Jul 29, 2014   #3
Follow this approach for the introduction paragraph:

1. Start with an interesting statement to catch the reader's attention
2. Give the background context to the reader
3. Express your view
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Aug 23, 2014   #4
I don't agree with this opinion in any way. Compulsory voluntary work is a contradiction, and not only in a literal way.

This is not a good way to open your essay. The reader does not have any clue about your topic.

Follow this approach for the introduction paragraph:
1. Start with an interesting statement to catch the reader's attention
2. Give the background context to the reader
3. Express your view

... yes, this is it and it helps the reader to understand your topic and your own opinion.
This is what I suggest for your intro;
Unpaid community work has become a very significant activity in high school curriculum in many countries. Some would argue that it should be made a compulsory involvement of the students. However, I strongly disagree with this view due to several reasons.
Pahan 1 / 1,907 553  
Aug 23, 2014   #5
On one hand, the purpose of community service or any form of voluntary work is a question still upopen for debate. It's theWhat is the primary goal of such community work?primer goalIs it to help those who are being aidedin need or to enrich the personality ofpersonally the volunteers?

I've said "at least" because making these services mandatory could even affect the other half of the purpose of volunteer work. The warm glow effect, as cynical as it is, explains why so many people are regular volunteers: they feel good about themselves.

Well, I see you can write very well. I like your ideas and sentence structures .... But your writing sound more of a speech than an essay :( I think you need to work on the tone of your writing to suit it more for essays.


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