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IELTS; Computer and Internet usage in the Arab World (Charts)


ch143 1 / 1  
Mar 17, 2013   #1
b]The chart shows the computer and internet per 1000 users in arab world.

Firstly, Egypt and Morocco there are 20 user of internet and computer per 1000 user inhabitants.there are same difference between Jordan and Oman 40 computers and internet per 1000 users.In s.arbia 3 time more use computer then internet difference is 60 and 20 and in Syria also same difference people use computer and internet 20 and 5 per 1000 user.In UAE there is 150 computer user and 350 internet user it is very high difference between compture and internet per 1000 user.

In last , Kuwait and Lebanon ,there were marginal differences between the two groups that are only 30 per thousand.

overall trend, the high usa of internet in UAE , Kuwait and Lebanon and overall same use of computer in eygpt, jordan , lebanon, oman and morocco.[/b][i][/i]




dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Mar 17, 2013   #2
The chart shows the computer and internet per 1000 users in arab world.

... 1000 users is wrong. As per the chart, it is 1000 inhabitants and the figure shown in the chart is out of such 1000 inhabitants how many people use computers and internet.

Firstly,As per the chart,in Egypt and Morocco there are 20 users of internet and computer per 1000 user inhabitants.there are same difference between Jordan and Oman 40 computers and internet per 1000 users.

.... This sentence is pretty confusing. Don't crowd your sentences with too many data.
In this task you are supposed to write a summary report detailing the information presented by the charts. So, it should be little different from the other writing tasks and should be presented in a reporting tone.
OP ch143 1 / 1  
Mar 17, 2013   #3
thnx to aviod me and plz lp me in my writting
water28190 2 / 3  
Mar 17, 2013   #4
Firstly, your essay seems to be not long enough (150 words required). I think I will love it more if there are 3 separated paragraphs: introduction, body, and conclusion

In last , in Kuwait and Lebanon ,there were marginal differences between the two groups that are only 30 per thousand.

In overall trend, the high usausage of internet in UAE , Kuwait and Lebanon and overall same use of computer in eygpt, jordan , lebanon, oman and morocco. have no subject and the structure is abit confused

I think you need more practice!


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