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'computers & gadgets' - Modern forms of communicate with people


Apsari 7 / 20 1  
Apr 14, 2014   #1
Modern forms of communication such email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends. This had has a negative effect on their social lives.

To what extent do you agree or disagree ?


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Nowdays, people live together with the social forms of communication which is the modern tools. It makes people sit and spend their time in front of their computer or their gadget for send email or messages with their friends. However, it is not so certain that this has damaged their social lives.

Communications in the office is neeeded, office empoyees have always more sit down in front of their computer or with their gadgets. It has not changed because send email and messages are their jobs everyday. However, they do not conscious if they open another program like facebook, twitter just seeing another friends. It means that they do their job but amount of their time also for not important thing. The negative impacts are they do not focus in their jobs also they spend their working time for not important thing.

On the other hand, I agree that communicate by the modern forms are really needed actually working and make bussiness. In my opinion, the function of communicate forms are more useful if people can make partners in their jobs. Actually, forms are more made to help human to communicate with people in another place which is we cannot meet with the partners directly. For instance, when i have a boyfriend who live in onother city and we had miss with each other sometimes we did call or skype to communicate. Modern forms really help all people in the world, we can watch the partners in another city when we miss them. Long distance relationship is not easy for young people so we had met on skype and watch each other in laptop.

In conclusion, I believe that generally people live with the useful of modern forms of communicate. In my view, it is difficult to argue that modern forms have had a negative influence on our social lives. On the other hand, people need to make sure that they still did their jobs well.

aryaayra 7 / 19 2  
Apr 14, 2014   #2
the function of communicate forms are more useful if people can make partners in their jobs

let me to correct the sentence..

The function of communicate forms is more useful, if people can make partners in their jobs

For instance, when i have a boyfriend who live in onother city and we had miss with each other sometimes we did call or skype to communicate

For instance, when I was in a relationship with my boyfriend who live in another city and we had missing each other, sometimes we did call or Skype to communicate
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Apr 14, 2014   #3
Nowdays, people live together with the social forms of communication which is the modern tools.

This is a poor sentence to begin your essay. It does not deliver a meaningful idea and also it is not grammatically correct either.

However, it is not so certain that this has damaged their social lives.

You are asked this question;

To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Tell whether you agree or disagree or even take a moderate stance. You should do that before you conclude your introduction.
Pahan 1 / 1,907 553  
Apr 14, 2014   #4
On the other hand, I agree that communicate by thecommunication via modern formstechnological channels is very essential in the work place or even in businessare really neededactually working and make bussiness.

Now you need to give examples to support the above reason. However, you say;

In my opinion, the function of communicate forms are more useful if people can make partners in their jobs.

Follow dumi's suggestion for your overall essay structure. It's a very effective structure in terms of your score and time :)
SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Apr 14, 2014   #5
Hi..

Nowa days,

... please kindly checking for spelling error

people live together with the social forms of communication which is the modern tools.

... People live in the vast growth of communication media.

Communications in the office is neeeded, office empl oyees have always more sit down in front of their computer or with their gadgets.

.... I think communication not only needed by the workforce but also other field of human's life. Probably, you can clarify this idea.

working and make bussiness

.. to work and to do business

In my opinion, the function of communicate forms are more useful if people can make partners in their jobs

... In my opinion, communication building, for workforce, benefits to build job partnership.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,195 459  
Apr 14, 2014   #6
Tell whether you agree or disagree or even take a moderate stance.

Agreed, agreed
A writer needs to keep in mind that the intro is often what a reader remembers best. Your intro should be the best part of your essay. If you could, state your own opinion in the introduction itself with a statement expressing your opinion very clearly.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Apr 14, 2014   #7
In conclusion, I believe that generally people live with the useful of modern forms of communicate. In my view, it is difficult to argue that modern forms have had a negative influence on our social lives. On the other hand, people need to make sure that they still did their jobs well.

In conclusion, based on the above reasoning, I believe that modern forms of communications have made our lives more comfortable. In my view, without the help of these modern communication techniques, it is very difficult to manage the busy and complicated life-styles that people live today. Therefore, I strongly hold the opinion that modern forms of communication do not influence our social lives negatively.


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