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The condition of Japan's population during 75 years


AhmadNashran 9 / 13 1  
Oct 30, 2016   #1
Task 1 IELTS; Japan's Population; Past, Present and Future Trends

The chart and table show the condition of Japan's population in the past, present and future the condition of Japan's population. Overall, it can be seen that the population trend increased gradually in every 5 years since 1950 until 2005. However, in 2010-215, there was slight decrease and predicted continually will be downward until 2055 which the elder people who are over 65s will be the highest one compare with other given years.

There was a gradual rise of Japan's population from 84.1 up to 127.8 since 1950 to 2010 respectively. Then, its number declined slowly down to 125.4 million in 2015. This population predicted will drop dramatically in 2055 by the number will be 89.9 million people.

On the other side, 1950 saw the smallest number of population of the people who were aged over 65 years, it was under one in twenty of the total population. The proportion of this classification continually increased until its prediction in 2055 as well. It is obvious that 25.7 million of elder people population were a fifth of the total population in 2005. Then, 2035 will take a portion for over two-fifths of the total population.
abhavsar 4 / 7 1  
Oct 30, 2016   #2
Hey Ahmad, I noticed a few grammatical errors here and there.

1. Replace "in every five years" with "every five years"
2. 2015, not 215
3. The third sentence is very confusing. Change "compare" to "compared." Again I'm not sure I even understand the phrase "there was slight decrease and predicted continually will be downward." I think you meant "there was slight decrease and was predicted to continually be downward."

4. 84.1million and 127.8million


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