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The Conditions of Water Supply In Indonesia


pokpok16 6 / 9  
Sep 20, 2016   #1
The Conditions of Water Supply In Indonesia

Water supply and sanitation in Indonesia is characterized by poor levels of access and service quality. According to data, there is over 40 million people lack access to an improve water and no access to improved sanitation. Only about 2% of people have access to filth in municipal areas, this is one of the lowest in the world among middle-income countries.


Access to improved water source in 2004 was 77%, which is 89% in urban and 72% in rural. Access to safe water is gauged by the number of people, which have a reasonable means of getting a qualify amount of water that is safe for drinking, washing, and essential menage to activities, expressed as a percentage of the total population.

Urban sanitation is the least well addressed of major policy issues in Indonesia. Poor sanitation in cities and small burgs is posing population health hazards though pollution of both ground and surface water sources used by urban populations for a variety of aims. Top-down delivery systems of the past have led to the poor not gaining sizable access to safe sanitation services in both urban and rural areas.

The provision of water and sanitation services in urban areas is the responsibility of PDAMs. PDAM take the responsibility due to the fact that supply and distribution of water are major concerns, these systems are massive engineering projects. Besides, many professionals are involved their planning, construction, and maintenance.

In conclusion, water is not only human need, but a human right since it is set the presence of any human being. Right to water is turning into right to life, due to the fact that urban life would be impossible without water supply systems.
erwiin 5 / 12  
Sep 20, 2016   #2
Hello, your essay is good. However, I would like to give some suggestions for it.

1. a reasonable means of getting a qualify (qualifying ) amount of water
2. to activities, (do not use a comma ) expressed as a percentage ...
3. many professionals are (have ) involved their planning, ...

Thank you
abdasyari93 9 / 19  
Sep 20, 2016   #3
Hello @pokpok16, I got some suggestion for your writing.

Here my advice:

1. Water supply and sanitation in Indonesia isare characterized by poor levels ...

2. ... 40 million people lack access to an improve water ..

3. PDAM takes the responsibility due ...

4. ... not only human need, but also a human right ...
mdamanhuri77 22 / 35 3  
Sep 20, 2016   #4
hi pokpok..
let me give you some advices,

Water supply and sanitation in Indonesia isare characterized by poor ...
According to data, there isare over 40 million people lack access to an improve waterwater improvement and no access to improvedimprove sanitation. Only at about 2% of people have access to filth in municipal areas, thisIt is one of the lowest ...

Access to improved waterwater improvement source in 2004 was 77% (...) for drinking, washing, and essential menage to activities (what is it means? ), expressed as a ...

Urban sanitation is the least well- addressed of major ...
... and small burgs is posing population health hazardsposing hazard health of people though pollution (...) surface water sources are used by urban ...

PDAM taketakes the responsibility due to the fact ...

#the common problem is building sentence with meaningful
bismillah 15 / 29 1  
Sep 20, 2016   #5
i have some advices for you about using "the"
THE is used to use known word, sentence official names such as nationality , the name of place, for example:
The united states ,The danau toba because they are pupular and known by many people
regarding on that,its better, " you can use the sentence or passage by the something that you have known.
the water supply should be The water supply that more official
and about grammar such as
people lack access should be lack people access
the adverb adjective is always placed to the first sentence from noun


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