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There are some conflicting theories on the subject - Who did discover America?


septiadara29 48 / 67 9  
Dec 1, 2016   #1
There was some theories which revealed that the real person who discovered America was not Columbus. Firstly, Zuan Chabotto, a person who traveled to places and decided to go to Venetia, claimed that Columbus did not reach into North America until 1498. Zuan Chabotto, was well known as John Cabot, had sailed into North America in the previous year earlier, 1497. It was proven by Alwyn Ruddock, an English scholar, in 1966. He found a letter by John Day, an English merchant, which mentioned that Cabot had reached in North America before Columbus did. Unfortunately, Ruddock had ordered to completely destroyed this letter untill it was not exist anymore at his death, in 2005.

Secondly, the greatest scholar and an honoured scientist who came from Uzbekistan, Abu Raihan al-Biruni, had learned about earth's co-ordinates, erath's circumference, and the principal of particular gravity. He had a great mind about an unknown suface of the Earth, which located between Europe and Asia, and able to be lived. Although Biruni had reached his conclusion about the land in 1037, he had not laid eyes at anytime. While Leif Ericson was a person, who had been sent to a foreign country to teach about Christian, had reached North America in 1000 with lack of understanding about what he had found.

Overall, until the present time, Biruni is getting his tittle of the discoverer of North America because of his calculations and observations. He was the greatest Central Asia explorer among the other earliest explorer.

Source : History Today
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,767 4770  
Dec 5, 2016   #2
Septia, your information presentation is confusing and does not allow the reader to accurately follow your flow of discussion. This happened because you made a mistake in your second sentence presentation. The main question that creates a glaring flaw in your summary is "Who is Zuan Chabotto?". This is followed up by "When did he travel to the Americas?". Finally, "Was he recorded in history as being the first one to land on America?" More importantly, what criteria was used in the research article to assess who rightly discovered America? Was it based on who landed first? Or who named the country and claimed it for his mother country?

The sentence development in the overall essay is not really good. It causes stress for the reader because it leaves one with more questions rather than answers because of the fact that your summary lacks key information which were contained in the original source. The explanation of the discovery of the letter is so wanting that it is obvious that there is a lack of understanding on your part. You need to practice more of your listening skills and seek the advice of your instructor regarding how to better recognize key words and essential parts within written text.

Always review your work before submission. If you find that you cannot understand certain parts, then go back to the original if you still can and look for the additional information to clarify your essay. It is of the utmost importance that you present accurate information in your essay because the examiner knows what to look for and that will have an effect on your final score.


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