TASK 2
Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.
To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?
Congestion and air pollution problems will not be over until the government applies the high tax for the people who have private vehicles more than one in order to decrease the number of private vehicles. Although increasing the price of petrol is considered to be a solution for this issue, this essay explains it is not the best way because Indonesia has ever raised the cost of the fuels, but the demand of private cars still increases recently. Finland can be a model country which succeeds in solving these problems.
Most of developing countries face the increasing number of vehicles which is the main cause of traffic jam and air pollution. Indonesia had tried to set the higher cost of petrol which is expected to be a way to reduce the number of private cars. However, it is more likely to be useless since the residents still afford to purchase the private cars even though they have to pay more expensive cost to fulfill the need of petrol.
Apparently, Indonesia must learn very much from Finland. As one of the healthiest countries in the world which has less pollution and traffic jam, Finland defines the high tax for private vehicles for their inhabitants. This regulation makes the alteration in people culture to more utilize the public transport than purchase the new car, so that it contributes to the decrease of traffic jam and air pollution in this country.
The key of success to solve growing traffic and pollution problems is the firmness and the consistency in applying the regulation about high tax for private cars. As long as it is controlled well, it is not impossible that Indonesia can be a country with a new face ―people can get the fresh air every day and the congestion is just a past.
Hi Ashela, as I go through your essay, I must say it is pretty comprehensive, you have all the points covered and you managed to voice out your opinions, about the task at hand and this issue is absolutely pressing these days, it's one of those issues that we face everyday and should be taken cared of, yes, there are a lot of issues to tackle, however, it should take priority as it definitely affects all other areas of our economy.
Moving forward, I have a few suggestions for your essay and for starters, don't forget to include the linking verbs into your sentences, as minor as they are, they complete the sentences and this will have an overall impact to the entire essay.
- applies the highhigher tax for the people who
- have more than one private vehicles more than one
- has ever raised the cost of the fuels,
- but the demand of private cars still increasesincreased recently.
- Finland can be a model country which succeedsthat succeeded in solving these problems.
- Most of the developing countries
- face thean increasing number of vehicles
- had tried to set thea higher cost of petrol which
- useless sinceas the residents still afford to
- purchase the private cars even though
- they have to pay more expensive cost to fulfill the need offor petrol.
There you have it Ashela, I hope the above remarks are helpful in your revision and I hope you follow through and try or practice editing the essay yourself.
