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Many consider starting to study a foreign language at primary school better than at high school

AugustinOlariu 1 / - 2  
Nov 22, 2016   #1
Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school.
Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

In our modern society, the question whether children should start learning a foreign language at primary school has been widely debated.Many consider studying a foreign language at primary school better than at high school , while others hold the opposite point of view.I honestly believe there are more benefits rather than drawbacks for a pupil to start learning his first foreign language at primary school.

On one hand, studies concluded that young children pick up languages more easily than teenagers,therefore resulting in a faster and more efficient learning. This is primarily due their enhanced cognitive abilities, memorizing skill and also their curious behaviour regarding every little detail.Moreover , the increasing demand upon knowing not only one international-use foreign language, justifies the purpose of learning it earlier because the sooner the better.In addition , at early ages , the timetables aren't embroidered and therefore teachers can come with innovative and interactive methods of teaching , making the lessons more pleasant and fruitful.

However, there is another side of a coin as always.To begin with,it is widely known kids tend to set their minds only to video games , electronic gadgets, while they are still at primary school. The attempt of teaching a foreign language may fail because they would most likely be confused and not bothered to compel it. In addition , it could be a less efficiently directive since children need to focus on other subjects such as math, natural science, and their own mother tongue language, which they might need it more than the foreign one.

Looking at the points discussed above, we can come to a conclusion that advantages of learning a foreign language at an early age outweigh the disadvantages. I believe a person equipped with more languages is definitely needed in our society to make our world more prosperous and flourished in the decades to come.
kaun 2 / 5  
Nov 23, 2016   #2
Hi @AugustinOlariu, I saw some minor mistakes, hope them help!

- On the one hand, studies ...
- ..earlier because of the sooner the better....
- ..and their own mother tongue language...
- Also, you should add white space after comma and dot
justivy03 - / 2,366 607  
Nov 24, 2016   #3
Hi Augustin, as this is my first review on your argumentative essay, I would like to WELCOME you to this ever growing family of writers, students and everybody who loves the skill and the art of writing. We hope you find this website to be helpful and even more so, valuable to your writing projects. We do strive to provide you with the most accurate and credible feedback that will hopefully enhance your article and boost your confidence upon submission.

Moving back to your essay, I believe you managed to convey the views that you value in consideration of the topic at hand and this is very crucial to the article, as each views should be discussed objectively, with both views given the same amount of importance, the same examples to back up your arguments.

Overall, the essay is well written, however, you can try to enhance the words that you choose in your sentences. Now, don't get me wrong, the words you choose are good and great in helping you express your views but it won't hurt if you pump up your words a bit more. Oh, I may not be able to rate you here on EF as we don't necessarily rate essays as to any standards, e.g. IELTS band etc, however, I can say that your sentence construction and the use of the English language is 8 out of 10. Keep writing.

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