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Writing Task 1 - consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002


Wilyaftika23 46 / 37 1  
Nov 8, 2016   #1
The table gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.

The table illustrates about the percentage of kinds of things which was bought by consumer in five different countries in 2002. Overall, it can be seen that, the shopper in five countries bought each item just under 35 percent and the most popular item was food or drink or tobacco for each country.

In the Ireland, most of consumer bought food, drink or tobacco more than others at 28.91 percent. Besides, the percentage of clothing or footwear was bought by purchaser bigger than the percentage of leisure or education at fewer than 6 and 2 percent respectively. In the same case, consumer from Italy, Spain, Sweden and Turkey were interest to buy food or drink or tobacco than others at under 35 percent. Whereas, the number of clothing or footwear was bought by buyer greater than the percentage of leisure or education at under 10 and 5 percent particularly.

Shopper from Turkey excessively purchased such as food or drink or tobacco and it became a country that high consume of this item which sold at 32.14 percent. Clothing or footwear was popular in the Italy and the percentage item was sold at 9 percent. The last was leisure or education, where many consumers from Turkey were spending on this item which sold at 4.35 percent.

Holt - / 7,527 2001  
Nov 8, 2016   #2
Wily, I am afraid to say that the possible score for this written work would be no more than 4. You have a lack of information in the opening statement. Which left the summary incomplete and ill informed. The sentences are not well developed and the thought process is not always coherent. This made the essay quite difficult to read as I had to take time to try and understand how the information that you presented connected with one another. Additionally, because you did not include the chart as an upload, I did not have a point of comparison for your statements and the actual information you were supplied with. Please remember to upload the illustration next time. Overall, this is a good attempt at writing a report summary. You should get better over time, provided you remember to take note of your current writing issues and then making sure to address those over your next few practice tests. I am sure you are going to show improvement. I look forward to reading it.


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