IELTS Writing Task 1 (consumption of spreads)

The line graph illustrates the amount of three kinds of spreads namely margarine, low fat and reduced spreads and butter consumed from 1981 to 2007. Units are measured in grams.

Overall, the consumption of margarine and butter decreased while that of low fat and reduced spreads, which were only available starting from 1996 increased. Initially, butter was the most popular spread but it was outcompeted by margarine from 1991. Nonetheless, both margarine and butter were overtaken by their low-fat/reduced counterparts eventually.

In 1981, the intake of butter was considerably higher than that of margarine (just over 140g and around 90g respectively). Then, the amount of butter consumed climbed to its peak at nearly 160g in 1986, whereas the figure of margarine fell to approximately 80g simultaneously. The volume of butter used plunged continuously afterwards and became about 50g in the final year.

In contrast, after the fall in 1986 to 80g, the usage of margarine recovered to 100g in 1991 and stayed the same in the following 5 years, just before its successive drop to exactly 40g in 2007. Meanwhile, the figure of low fat and reduced spreads started off low at around 10g in 1996 and grew rapidly to slightly above 80g in 2001. After that, it declined to 70g in 2007 but still dominated over the other two spread products.

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You should use an Oxford comma when enumerating related items. You partially did this in the summary overview. Points will be deducted from the GRA score because of the inconsistent usage though. You did a good job in mentioning the units of measurement. Most analysis omit that part, which causes TA and C+C deductions.

While you did mention the trending statement, you did not place it in the correct paragraph. That should be the last sentence of the summary overview since it is a part of the summarized information.

Do not enclose any information in a parenthesis because that indicates optional information. Since all of the information is required, you have to mention it as an integrated part of the paragraph.