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Continuous development in medical care is a must to provide a better help for people


cldales /  
Apr 18, 2015   #1
Essay Task: One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

It is true that medical care development has improved people's quality of life. While others argue that this results in a dramatic increase in the world's population, I view this trend as beneficial.

It is unarguable that it a basic human right to receive treatment, and access to medical care must be within reach at all times. In this instance, the availability of medical care to cure diseases deemed incurable and unmanageable in the past, is praise-worthy. In bygone years, for example, the flu had a history of obliterating civilizations of many aborigines and had crippled more. This disease condition could have affected the people of the present in the same manner as the past; but knowledge on Immunology led to the research and production of vaccines which is now widely used to prevent contracting the disease. Thus, human life will not flourish if improvements on and development of new medical care is discouraged.

justivy03 - / 2,367 607  
Apr 18, 2015   #2
- This disease condition could have affected the people of the present in the same manner as the past(; - DELETE) but knowledge on
- Moreover, the increasing longevity of people viewed as a drawback because (of - DELETE) the advancement in medicine is outright obnoxious. - - -- Research in these areas must(, - DELETE) therefore, be encouraged to benefit a lot of people.

Cldales, your analysis is far better than what I expected, GOOD JOB. Your work is very accurate, very precise and straight to the point.Next time you sure will do far better than this, remember to proof read your work before you submit it.

Cheers and keep writing!!!
Adhisti 20 / 19 2  
Apr 18, 2015   #3
It isunarguable(what do you mean? "Hesitated" may be?) thatit a basic human right(where is the verb?) to receive treatment, and (...) be within reach at all the times.

This disease condition could have affected the people of the present ...
thutyedaniel 32 / 38 17  
Apr 19, 2015   #4
Hi @cldales :)

In conclusion, there must be a continuous development in medical care to help people, and the rise in life expectancy related to this must be viewed as progress. (it's to sort to be conclusion)

you should paraphrase your introduction, your own opinion, and your recommendation)


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