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Who should control scientific researches - state authorities (governments) or private companies?


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Sep 11, 2019   #1

Writing task2 - Scientific research



Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments rather than private companies. Do you agree or disagree?

In these days, people contemplate that scientific studies should be conducted by goverments instead of private companies. In my opinion, I just partly concur on this view point because of various reasons.

To begin with, there are some merits of government which takes care of scientific studies. Firstly, as goverments of different countries can co-operate with each other. To be more specific, they may be able to conduct studies on a larger scale or investment. For instance, they can carry out research into ways of dealing with global warming. Secondly, unlike private companies, governments tend to pay more attention to research areas that can bring more beneficial to society. Obiviously, the major concern for government are enviromental issues and crime rate. Thus, they have spent more money on the studies involved.

However, I believe that private companies also play a vital role in scientific studies. The first reason is that private companies could help to reduce the pressure on government's budget. This leads to that citizens would have to pay lower taxes and the authorities have more cash to spend on other crucial areas such as education, military and medical. Another reason is that the top priority of companies is to earn more money, they would have more motivation to conduct research more quickly and more effficiently.

In conclusion, for all the reasons I mentioned in this essay, I hold belief that studies need to conduct not only by goverment but also by companies.

Bastian 1 / 2 1  
1 day ago   #2
Your essay is well structured. It seems to, however, lack coherence and deviates from the original viewpoint you agree with and by the end of it, seem to disagree with. It has some grammatical flaws and could benefit from a careful evaluation of your stance in the conclusion. You should proofread your essay thoroughly and ask someone who's well qualified in English, let's say an English teacher, to go through your essay so they can point out your grammatical errors after you make the following changes.

In these days, people contemplate that ... In my opinion, I just ...

You don't need to restate the question in your words. Just begin by stating your opinion and phrasing it in the context of the question. Better yet, if you have space, give some subtext to the beginning of your answer. E.g. The number of academic/scientific researches which are conducted in any year. Which publications are they printed in? Include the source of your statistics as well. After this context, you can begin normally by saying, 'I believe that scientific researches should be conducted by governments instead of private entities as they're less likely to influence results in favour of profit-maximisation and have larger pockets to finance adequate research as well.'

After this introduction, you can begin with your paragraphs with one point per paragraph. The introduction also acts as a framing device for your answer, ensuring you don't deviate.

In the end, carefully state and evaluate your stance. So, should research be conducted by governments or companies? If you think companies should be involved, what sort of regulation may be required to ensure ethical violations do not occur and the data is not manipulated, e.g. in the case of marketing companies? Lastly, how would suitable competition be inculcated in the sphere? So how would you promote research companies like think tanks and market-research companies?

I hope this answer was helpful. Do reply if you have any other doubts.


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