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Every conversation has potential to develop into pro and contra - politic or other sensitive topics


ramzi06 9 / 17 4  
Aug 22, 2016   #1
TED summary, 10 ways to have a better conversation by Mrs Celeste Headlee

These day, this world that we live in, this world which every conversation has potential to develop about pro and contra, politic, number of issues are not normal. Research study show that 10 thousands people in america at these moment were more divided than we had ever been in history. We are less likely to compromise which means we are not listening each other and we are making decisions based on what we belief. A conversation need balance between talking and listening. Teenager in USA are more likely to send text rather than talk to each other which make teacher feel fail to teach communication skill.

In this video, the speaker will teach 10 basic how to be have better conversation without wasting your time and boring. First, Don't multitasking, means that when you talk to somone meanwhile you think another topic. Secondly,Don't act like teacher. Because if we concesive about someone opinion it will naturally broke the good conversation. Next, Use open questions, start with 5W1H (what, who, where, why, when and how) and don't make complicated question. Also, Go with the flow, means that if someone ideas are coming, then you should let it out.Fifth, If you don't know, say don't know. Thereafter, Don't compare your experience with them. Please also remember about not repeating your question, it is humiliating and boring. More importantly, stay out the long-winded and forget about details. Eventually, Listen to them and Talk briefly, we tend to listen not to understand but with the intend to reply.

akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Aug 23, 2016   #2
Hi Ramzi
These are my corrections.


These dayS,
A potential to develop about INTO pro and contra, politic,
A number of issues are not normal.
Research study showED that 10 thousands people in America at these momentS
are making decisions based on what we belief BELIEVE.
A conversation needS A balance between talking and listening.
TeenagerS in USA are more likely to send A text rather than talk to each other which make A teacher feel fail to teach communication skill.

In this video, the speaker will teach 10 basic how to be have THE better conversation
First, Don't DO NOT (DO NOT CONTRACTION IN THE FORMAL WRITING) multitasking, means that when you talk to somone SOMEONE mean while you think another topic. Secondly,Don't DO NOT act like THE teacher. Because if we concesive CONCEIVE about someone opinion it will naturally broke BREAK the good conversation. Next, Use USA openED questions, start with 5W1H (what, who, where, why, when and how) and don't DO NOT make THE complicated question.


Ramzi, I do not know why you make a large number of grammar errors although the previous writing was free of the major errors. You should reread your writing before you upload. Following that, you are likely to use the adverb as the connector between the sentences. You should harness the linking words to make your summary smoother when readers move from a topic to another topic.
ekalamarsyari11 72 / 108 9  
Aug 23, 2016   #3
These day, this world that we live in,we live in world which (...) about pro and contra , politic, number of ...
Research study show that 10 thousands people
it is a redundancy, you should choose one word only
Research shows that 10 thousands people

Teenagers in USA are more likely to

the speaker will teach 10 basic ways

stay out the long-winded and forget about details
you should give an object in this sentence
Faridadwi18 67 / 104 13  
Aug 23, 2016   #4
Hi Ramzi,

- These dayS , this world that we live in,thispeople live in the world which (...) about pro and contra , politic, number of ...
- A Research study showS that 10 thousands people ...
- Teenager in USA are more likely to send text rather than (...) make teacher feeling failed to teach communication skill.
- In this video, the speaker will teach 10 basicSabout how to be have better conversation without wasting your time and boringfeel bored .

Hopefully it helps.
ashelarisa48 36 / 52 4  
Aug 23, 2016   #5
Hai Ramzi, I am gonna try to give some feedback.

This world that we live in, this world which every conversation has potential to ...--> I think you should simplify this sentence so that the reader can understand easier.

Research study shows that 10 thousands people in america ...

We are less likely to compromise which means we are not listening each other and we are making decisions based on what we belief.
(It will be better if we decrease to use 'we' in academic writing. Try to use 'people', 'some people', to make it more general)

A conversation needs balance between talking and listening.

Teenagers in USA are more likely prefer to send text messages rather than to talk to each other which makes teacher feeling failed to teach communication skill.

You have to pay more attention to countable and uncountable noun, also to verb and adjective. (Ex : fail = verb, failed = adjective)

Hope it helps, keep writing! ^^


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