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Correct and rate my essay essay. Its on laws being rigid or flexible


designingsally 4 / 7  
Jul 30, 2009   #1
Laws should not be rigid or fixed. Instead, they should be flexible enough to take account of various circumstances, times, and places.

Laws exist to maintain peace, and law and order. Laws and legislation are made for human welfare. It shapes the country, and the economic. Laws should be flexible enough so that it can be appropriately incorporated in different circumstances.

I would like to highlight the ongoing 26/11 Mumbai terror case. In this particular case, the Indian government has opted for fast tracking the case. Special public prosecutors and judges are appointed to work on this case. Indian judicial system is known for slow trials and prosecutions. Fast tracking such cases entrusts people's faith into the judicial system. Recently, an actor was accused for allegedly raping this maid. The Mumbai High court decided to fast track this particular case. This action broke the thought that rich and famous personality can get away with any type of crime. I think flexible laws have the privilege to fast track court cases, appoint special judge, and setup enquiry commission.

On the contrary, flexible laws and judicial system have raised controversies. The Prevention of Terrorist Act also known as the POTA was a controversial law which raised several eyebrows. This Act was made into law in the year 2002. This law was intended to provide legal framework to strengthen administrative rights to fight terrorism in India. Once this law was implemented, reports of the law being misused surfaced. Police authorities used the law at their inconvenience. Ultimately, this law was repealed after two years. Laws must be structured in such a way that it should not have any loopholes, yet be flexible.

I think laws should not remain rigid under all circumstances. It is important to consider the nature of the crime, and the public interest in the case. I think rape cases, anti national crimes must be given high importance. Special privileges can be opted only if the laws are flexible yet strong. I think rigid laws can be implemented under circumstances, which do not work for highly populated nations, and democratic nations. Hence, I conclude that it is better to have laws flexible enough to take account of various circumstances, times, and places.
Ond 1 / 5  
Jul 30, 2009   #2
It shapes the country, and the economic economy.

I would like to highlight the ongoing 26/11 Mumbai terror case. In this particular case, the Indian government has opted for fast tracking the case. Special public prosecutors and judges are appointed to work on this case.

^In these three consecutive sentences, try substituting in another word for 'case'. Even though it isn't, your use of language may appear to the reader stunted and unsophisticaed with constant repetition. How about 'event', 'occurrence', or 'situation'?

^Also consider another phrase or word for 'fast track'.

This action broke the thought that rich and famous personality personalities can get away with any type of crime.
^In the last paragraph, cut down on the number of "I think"s being used.

Overall, I would say it's a pretty good attempt. Your sentences and flow of ideas are clear cut and precise, and it is to the point. Good spread of both examples and opinions. However, revise some of your words and phrases and look for alternatives to replace the repetitive ones.

Good job!
EF_Sean 6 / 3,491  
Jul 30, 2009   #3
When talking about a plural noun, such as "laws," you must use the plural pronoun "they" to refer to it, rather than "it."

Also, your essay will be stronger if you define your key terms in your introduction. What does it mean to describe a law as "flexible?" If your thesis is that "Laws must be structured in such a way that they should not have any loopholes, yet be flexible." what principles should be used to determine when flexibility reaches the point of becoming a loophole. Or, put another way, how flexible can you make a law before it cease to be a law and becomes more of a guideline?
EF_Simone 2 / 1,986  
Jul 30, 2009   #5
Laws shape the country [omit comma] and the economy .


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