Students and workers mobility is an
ever increasing trend.
I believe its
advantages outweigh its disadvantages.
Students and workers mobility is ever increasing trend. In current economic climate it has become more common for young adults to relocate. This is often due to local circumstance or the desire to gain higher education for their later careers. I believe it advantages outweigh its disadvantages.
Well, I don't find major issues with grammar or vocabulary other than the minor points I cited above. However, I find you do not introduce your prompt to the reader properly. Your prompt is about the impact of young people not living with their parents during adolescence years. The introduction is meant for introducing your prompt to the reader and this one fails to do the job properly. That's my personal view and wait for others' comments :D