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"Countries of residence of overseas students in Australia" graph for ielts


sweetheart87 11 / 32  
Nov 15, 2010   #1
The graph show four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia.

Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant"

write al least 150 words.


I'm sorry but I couldn't find the image.
Even than I hope that you can help me. THANK YOU IN ADVANCE!

The chart shows the trend of the numeber of foreign students in Australia between 1982 and 2000. The students' places of origin are four countries: Indonesia, Hong Kong, Malaysia and Singapore.

We can see that overall trend of coutries had in two decades a stedy increse. It is interesting to see that the number of overseas students in Malaysia was around 10.000 of people in the first decade.

Instead the number of Chinese students sharply rose from 1.000 to 10.000.
In the last decade the number of students of this country was more higher than the students of other three.

The trend of Indonesian student gradually incresed from 1987 to 1996 when reached a high point of 19.000 of people in 1997.

Number of students who come from Singapore remained constant for the first eight years. Afterwards, the number of students quickly rose in 1990 but in the overall the amount of people was the lowest regard all countries.

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anb_duck /  
Nov 15, 2010   #2
You surely made a lot of spelling mistakes. Make sure you recheck your work before submitting it.

The students' places of origin are four countries: Indonesia, Hong Kong, Malaysia and Singapore.

It sounds quite weird. I think this sounds better "The students originates from four countries which are Indonesia, Hong Kong, Malaysia and Singapore."

We can see that overall trend of coutries had in two decades a stedy increse

Avoid using personal pronoun such as "We". Your sentence is also grammatically incorrect and makes no sense. I prefer "The overall trend increased steadily over the two decades"

It is interesting to see that the number of overseas students in Malaysia was around 10.000 of people in the first decade.

Is it not "Malaysian students in Australia"?

The trend of Indonesian student gradually incresed from 1987 to 1996 when reached a high point of 19.000 of people in 1997.

"The trend of Indonesian students gradually increased between the year 1987 and 1996 and reached its peak of 19000 people in 1997"

Number of students who come from Singapore remained constant for the first eight years. Afterwards, the number of students quickly rose in 1990 but in the overall the amount of people was the lowest regard all countries.

"The number of students who were from Singapore remained constant for the first eight years but rose dramatically in 1990. In spite of that, the number of Singaporean students were the least among all."

It obviously sounds better.

Well, there is no chart so I may make some word mistakes in my correction.

Overall, I think you should practice more.
Hope this helps :)
OP sweetheart87 11 / 32  
Nov 15, 2010   #3
Nathali thank you so much!!!!
It's very difficult to think in English when I write.
I hope to improve my English.
:D
sobin 12 / 24  
Nov 15, 2010   #4
its good!!that you have tried to describe the graph very accurately..But I think it will be better than this if you use some more different words or sentence in certain places.eg:

''We can see that .... stedy increse. It is interesting to see that ... in the first decade''.
they look a bit similar..
all the best...:-)
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anb_duck /  
Nov 18, 2010   #5
It sounds quite weird. I think this sounds better "The students originatesoriginated from four countries which are Indonesia, Hong Kong, Malaysia and Singapore."

Sorry, I made a mistake. :)
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Nov 25, 2010   #6
The chart shows the trend of the number of foreign students in Australia between 1982 and 2000.

We can see that overall trend of the countries in two decades involved a steady increase of students studying in Australia

It is interesting to see that the number of overseas students in Malaysia was around 10.000 of people in the first decade.

In the last decade the number of students of from this country was more higher than ...

The number of students...

...s quickly rose in 1990, but in the overall the amount of people was the lowest compared to all other countries.

:-)


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