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IELTS: "Countryside resort"; Where would you like to spend you unforgettable holidays next summer?


Luke Cameron Jr 2 / 5 1  
Sep 11, 2014   #1
By way of personal explanation, summer holidays are the best way possible to get away from the hustle and bustle of our daily banal lives. Plus, there must be no one who does not take an interest in having memorable summer holidays somewhere at least somewhat delectable. As for me, next summer I would like to find myself in a countryside resort, on the basis that I now can not get enough of tranquillity, fresh air and last but not least time to reinforce rapport with my family.

From the very start, the countryside resorts are unquestionably famed for their serenity, while many other places are notorious for their noise pollution. Since I am acousticophobic, I am in favour of holidaying in the country. Holiday takers, counting me, periodically opt for the rural spots, given that their tranquillity makes it genuinely inviting for people to chill out. Not only do they label the country resorts as relaxing, but also as a means of alleviating stress which is again owing to their pacific environment.

What is more, I am not averse to having first-rate relaxation amid purely fresh air. One can inwardly feel rejuvenated and free-spirited when there are trees, flowers and all sorts of plants all around you. The fresh air could be the salvation for those who are sick and tired of insalubrious atmosphere of urban areas. So, the more you generally spend your holidays in the countryside the better the chances that your life expectancy gets prolonged.

For I am wholly engrossed in the hard process of studying math and putting a great deal of energy into learning the English language, oftentimes I feel isolated from my family. To make the matters worse, both of my parents have recently taken up challenging projects in their work places. Hence, I see my parents only in the evenings. If we spend our next summer holidays fortifying our relationship altogether it would, beyond any doubt, be a dream come true.

At the end of the day, the view I still have is setting off for a countryside resort to have my summer holidays would be truly unforgettable, down to the arguments that I kindly listed above.

vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Sep 11, 2014   #2
I've got some suggestions and revisions for you to consider in the revision of your paper. I believe that these changes will help improve the quality of the arguments you presented :-)

who does not take an interest in having memorable summer holidays somewhereat least somewhat delectable. As for me, next summer I would like to find myself in a countryside resort,on the basis that I nowcan not get enough of tranquillity, fresh air and last but not least time to reinforce rapport with my family.

- Summer holidays are the best way to get away from the hustle and bustle... There isn't a person who does not ... As for me, I would like to spend next summer at a countryside resort . Simply because I can't get enough tranquility in my life, fresh air, and bonding time with my family.

-In my opinion, country side resorts, famed for their serenity, is the perfect summer vacation place for an acuosticophobic such as I... Most holiday takers, including myself, opt for rural spots because of the tranquility the place offers. It is a relaxing atmosphere where people can alleviate stress and clear their minds.

- You need to be careful and remember to check yourself for redundancies.

- Nobody is averse to getting some fresh air and relaxation during their vacation. The experience helps a person recharge and feel rejuvenated after spending time communing with nature. Some holistic health experts believe that countryside vacations actually have a healing and life prolonging effect on the vacationers.

For I am wholly engrossed in the hard process of studying math and putting a great deal of energy into learning the English language, oftentimes I feel isolated from my family.

- This paragraph is totally disconnected from the previous ones. Unless you can present a connection between the previous paragraphs and a countryside vacation your family took, this paragraph is misplaced.

At the end of the day, the view...

- Surely you can further improve this statement in order to create an interesting conclusion for your paper. This kind of conclusion is boring and does not really help to tie the previous paragraphs into a solid conclusion for you.
OP Luke Cameron Jr 2 / 5 1  
Sep 11, 2014   #3
It is been certainly helpful ! ! ! Thank you!
Anouar 12 / 35  
Sep 11, 2014   #4
I think that you need more focus on an elegent conclusion
fikri 5 / 317 71  
Sep 11, 2014   #5
By way of personal explanation, summer holidays are the best way possible to get away from the hustle and bustle of our daily banal lives

By way of personal explanation,summer holiday is one of the best possible ways to get away from the hustle and bustle of our daily banal lives

put an adjective before the noun,

As for me, next summer I would like to find myself in a countryside resort, on the basis that I now can not get enough now I cannot get enough of tranquillity, fresh air and last but not least time to reinforce rapport with my family.

cannot is always written as one word,

pay more attention to some small details


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