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Creating a descriptive paragraph on the subject of: Library


Lori 1 / 2  
Feb 26, 2012   #1
I need help creating a descriptive paragraph on the subject of: Library. I have until midnight tonight.
someone please help me!!!!

Library

I love going to the Library, it's one of my favorite hobbies. I've managed to pass my hobby to my two little grand-sons Mario seven and Jay five years old. We visit the Library at least three times a week. One of my most enjoyable moments are when we arrive at the library my two little grand-sons can't wait for me to stop and park the car, when their little feet's hit the ground they run full speed to open up the library door for me. Next, they run inside pick up two or three books to read and find them a table and seat to sit down in. After, they sit both take turns reading a book to each other. Jay can't read yet but Mario let Jay read to him by telling the story thru the pictures in the story book. I'm very amazed when I see the excitement in their eyes storming thru the library looking for books to read trying to read more than one book at a time not knowing for sure which one to read first. I laugh at the both of them because they remind me of myself when my oldest sister passed her hobby on to me taking me to the library when I was five years old. While my grand-sons are sharing stories I sit quietly working on my lap-top for my company usually, I'm done working in an hour then the boys are done reading and logged on to one of the library computers on the (nick.com), internet site for kids to watch movies are play games, they are very amused at all the different things they get to do at the library. The library that I take them to have a park with a fishing pond and water park, swings and sliding boards, where kids can play and have lots of fun and feed the birds and ducks that are in the pond.

Jennyflower81 - / 690 96  
Feb 26, 2012   #2
Descriptive

You have written about many actions and activities that occur at the library, but I would like to read more description. This is what I would do: Write about your day at the library as if it is a mini-story. Begin with the feelings the library evokes in you and your family- excitement. Then, the visual- when you walk up to the building, what is the scenery? Inside, what stands out? There must be a wonderful community atmosphere in the library, so it is comforting to be there. Conclude with leaving the library and sum it up with a strong statement about how special the library is to you and your family.

I hope this helps :) Good luck in school!
OP Lori 1 / 2  
Feb 26, 2012   #3
Library

I love going to the library, it's one of my favorite hobbies. When I arrive at the library it's very calm and peaceful. Upon entering thru the first set of glass doors which lead to a second set of glass doors, that land you right into the library where, there is three beautiful beige round tables with four red, blue, green and yellow chairs per table for the little children to be seated, and read a variety of books By Dr. Seuss "On beyond Zebra" and Norman Birdwell "Clifford" the list of books for kids go on and on. The library has a variety of books on resumes, grammar, math, cooking, college entrance exams, and the list goes on and on for teens and adults. Seating capacity is limited with about fourteen mainframe Compaq computers and ten laptops to rent out for free. People come their surfing the free internet looking for jobs and doing term papers or just hanging out because it's very quiet and peaceful the flooring have plush carpet you can't hear anyone walking the noise is very minimal. I love going to the library to work on my laptop and complete my work on my computer for my company because it's very calm and peaceful and a wonderful place to hang out with your family or friends.
OP Lori 1 / 2  
Feb 26, 2012   #4
Jenny Flower I have revised and sent a new descriptive paragraph. Please help!

Thanks,

Lori
Jennyflower81 - / 690 96  
Mar 1, 2012   #5
Hi :) No problem, I can help some more. I can correct a few grammar issues.

This sentence needs some work, it is way too long. I will try to re-write it a little, to give you an idea of how to do it differently.

Upon entering thru the first set of glass doors which lead to a second set of glass doors, that land you right into the library where, there is three beautiful beige round tables with four red, blue, green and yellow chairs per table for the little children to be seated, and read a variety of books By Dr. Seuss "On beyond Zebra" and Norman Birdwell "Clifford" the list of books for kids go on and on.

The entrance consists of two sets of glass doors that lead right into the library. There are three beautiful tables, which are beige and round. Each table has four brightly colored chairs for the young children to sit down, a variety of books are available to them. Our favorites are Dr. Seuss "On beyond Zebra" and Norman Birdwell "Clifford,"

The library has a varietymany genres of books, includingresumes, grammar, math, cooking, college entrance exams;and the list goes on and on for teens and adults.

People come their surfinguse the free internet to look for jobs,anddoingwrite term papers or just hang out because it's very quiet and peaceful.The flooring has plush carpetsand you can't hear anyone walking,so the noise is very minimal.


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