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Essay about whether creative artists should express their ideas in public freely


Martin2012 2 / 1  
Feb 25, 2012   #1
Greetings!
As we know, art can contribute to the development of our society. But that is not meant that artists have freedom to express their ideas in whichever way they wish.

To some extent, I am for the idea that artists express their feelings properly. After all, our country is democratic, everyone has the right to show their ideas and feelings, including artists. What's more, the masterpieces artists create can enrich our culture, making our life clourful and attractive.

However, on the other hand, it is unwise for government to allow artists to express their feelings freely. Government should establish restrictions on artists. Here are some reasons.

Firstly some ideas related to violence or pornography is detrimental to teenagers, because most teenagers have no prominent ability of differentiation, so they are more likely to be misled. Take Japan for example. Japan is famous for its animations, but the makers of it (a kind of artist), add many violence elements to the animations, so the crime rate in Japan has been in a high level. Secondly, with a great many different ideas emerge, conflicts between artists will ensue. In history, many wars broke out due to cultural difference. So a creative artist can't bear other artists holding opposite ideas to him, especially in the public, this is a common sense. Last but not least, the mainstream values might be ruined by too many different ideas. So the ideas which go against the mainstream values should not be allowed in the public.

In conclusion, it is positive to offer creative artists a platform to demonstrate their outstanding abilities, but do remember they must do it properly and that needs the restrictions of the laws.
kigali1 2 / 5  
Feb 25, 2012   #2
Art has been at the centre of many contributions to society's development. Nonetheless , this should not mean that artists are given absolute freedom to express their ideas in whichever way they wish.

To some extent, I am for the idea that artists express their feelings properly. After all, our country is democratic, everyone has the right to show their ideas and feelings, including artists. What's more, the masterpieces artists create can enrich our culture, making our life clourful and attractive.

However, on the other hand, it is unwise for government to allow artists to express their feelings freely. Government should establish restrictions on artists due to a number of important reasons . Here are some reasons.FirstlyFor example , some certain ideas related to violence or pornography isare detrimental to teenagers, because most teenagers have no prominent ability of differentiation, so they are more likely to be misled. Take Japan for example.This may be seen in the case of Japan , which is famous for its animations, but the makers of it (a kind of artist), add many violence elements to the animations, which is often reflected in the high crime rate in Japanhas been in a high level.Secondly,Additionally,with the emergence ofagreat many different ideas emergethrough artistic output , conflicts between artists will ensue. In history, many wars broke out due to cultural difference. So A creative artist can'tmay not be able to bear other artists holding opposite ideas to her or him, especially in the public. this is a common sense. Last but not least, the mainstream values might be ruined by too many different ideas. So the ideas which go against the mainstream values should not be allowed in the public.

In conclusion, it is positive to offer creative artists a platform to demonstrate their outstanding abilities, but doit is important to remember that they must do it properly and that needs thesomerestrictive laws should be in place .

**** I hope you find this input useful :)...I have one more suggestion; when you talk about "mainstream values" that should not be destroyed, perhaps you can give a few examples of these values (because there certainly are mainstream values we should not tamper with, but I think there are others that could use a little artistic input/rebellion! :P)
OP Martin2012 2 / 1  
Feb 25, 2012   #3
kigali1
Thank you for your help.
your suggestions are useful!
Have a good weekend!
domo 2 / 1  
Feb 25, 2012   #4
good essay
Athena - / 83 3  
Feb 26, 2012   #5
Hi Tianyu,

I like the way in which your essay is written. I feel that you should add one or two more examples to support your arguments and make it stronger. I also found acouple of things that I thought you could change:


However, oO n the other hand, it is unwise for government to allow artists to express their feelings freely.

Governments should establish restrictions on artists ....

Good Luck :)


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