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Criminal Reoffence - Causes and Solutions


jhhh11 14 / 30  
Jul 28, 2020   #1
Many thanks to those you commented on my previous writing. Hope to receive your opinions on this piece as well!
Thank you to all!

TOPIC:

Many criminals commit further crimes as soon as they released from prison

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What do you think are the causes of this?
What potential solutions can you suggest?

WORD COUNT: 294.

The issue of criminals re-offence has always been concerning for the authorities. There are some possible reasons why one person still break the law after being in prison. In this essay, I will suggest some ways to help mitigate the problems.

There is no doubt that having a criminal record can dramatically impact a person's life, especially from the personal finance and social perspectives. Coming out from prisons, many offenders are left behind from a fast-growing economy. The lack of trade skills and knowledge refrain ex-criminals from earning an adequate living. I think that low incomes is the major reason that push people to commit wrong doings. In addition, society tends to avoid connections to people with a troubled past, making these individuals a victim of isolation and discrimination. The feeling of bitterness may re-evoke their cognitive law-breaking patterns.

From my perspective, both the government and the society can help to resolve these problems. To start off, the mental health of confined individuals must be well-cared about. There should be well-designed rehabilitation programs that teach them the rights and wrongs, and the responsibilities of a good citizens. With the right techniques, changing a person from his understanding is key to a powerful improvement in behaviors. Besides that, to ensure that criminals can be employed after the imprisonment, apprenticeship programs and safe community jobs can provide these people with skills and experiences. At the same time, we should have more generous view about offenders and encourage them to re-integrate into the community.

It is true that some criminals repeat their mistakes in the past. To me, reasons may varies from financial hardships to the failure to create desirable social relationships. To tackle these issues, governments should provide supportive rehabilitation programs and people in the community should also change their attitudes toward ex-criminals.

Holt [Contributor] - / 9,031 2721  
Jul 28, 2020   #2
Outline the response to the questions. The format is :
Restatement + Response

State the original prompt in your own words, then offer the causes and solutions. The outline will help you keep track of what you have to discuss in the discussion paragraphs. 2 connected causes in one paragraph, 2 connected solutions in the next paragraph for this 4 paragraph essay.

Stop saying "There is no doubt" in your essay because, while you may not doubt your discussion, others have their doubts. So do not be so matter of fact in your presentation. Use general references, avoid giving personal opinions when not required, such as in this instance.

Your paragraphs are under developed. Use less topics, more explanations that support and connect them. To repeat, use only 2 connected topics per paragraph. 2 topics allows you to properly explain and discuss, 3 means all topics are not properly explained, given an example, and completed with proper reasoning.


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