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IELTS>criminal trials in law court are telecasted on Television for public


znack 7 / 31 5  
Jan 16, 2014   #1
In some countries, criminal trials in law court are telecasted on Television for public. Do you think advantages of this outweigh its disadvantages?

In a world of the media,there is increasing variations of television shows. Some people believe that the broadcasting from court might pose a negative effect on the audience. However, in my opinion, modern society has to understand the principles how legal system works.

To begin with, one of the argument against might be that the offenders have become a sort of celebrities in eyes of youth. While children have access to the internet and allied resources, they may able to adopt unappropriated behavior from the heroes in the television shows about the court's trials. For instance, there is a widely popular video in Youtube, where a girl demonstrates such attitude toward a judge. However, it educates them as well about dire consequences which follow after this type of behavior. Hence, the effectiveness of broadcasting from a court can be necessary.

Apart from the promotion of the correct way to conduct, an ordinary people can also comprehend an entire prosecution process by watching a trial in television, and therefore be aware of his legal rights. Some people do not have knowledge how to behave with the police, and so through learning the basic of law, they would be benefited. An example of this is my youngest brother, He likes to watch real telecasting from a court as it explains the reasons behind each sentence. As a result, he is now able to protect himself in case of a criminal bias. Thus, the positive aspect can be viewed in regard to broadcasting from a court.

To sum up, although there appears to be an argument against television broadcasting of trials on the basis of promotion wrong types of behaviors,I firmly believe that this phenomenon brings tremendous benefits in terms of education purposes.Therefore, It is hoped that a similar strategy will be put into action in other countries as well.

Please evaluate this attempt.
Thank you in advance
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Jan 17, 2014   #2
In a world of the media,there is increasing variations of television shows.

.... This is a pretty confusing hook :(

Some people believe that the broadcasting from court might pose a negative effect on the audience.

Your prompt does not talk about broadcasting from court and therefore do not narrow down the scope of your prompt. Your introduction should introduce the topic it is original sense to the reader. That's important.

However, in my opinion, modern society has to understand the principles how legal system works

Again, this is not what they expect you as the opinion. They ask you -

Do you think advantages of this outweigh its disadvantages?

You need to answer this question.
mrmo2610 1 / 1  
Jan 18, 2014   #3
unappropriated behavior

--> inappropriate behavior

an ordinary people

--> ordinary people
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Jan 18, 2014   #4
In a world of the media,there is increasing variations of television shows.

I wish your hook had been more meaningful and interesting :(

Some people believe that thebroadcasting from court might pose a negative effect on the audience.

Broadcasting and telecasting are two different things. Broadcasting is connected with radio stations and it means the same as wire radio programs. However, telecasting is something to do with television. As Pahan also mentions above, try and keep a good alignment between your writing and your prompt.
OP znack 7 / 31 5  
Jan 18, 2014   #5
Thanks for all comments
Specially,Pahan,with your help, I today passed Ielts as it was almost similar question.
However, I thought that broadcasting is not only radio transmitting it include tv as well.
This is quotation from Wiki: Broadcasting is the distribution of audio and video content to a dispersed audience via any audio or visual mass communications medium, but usually one using electromagnetic radiation (radio waves)

Therefore, I used it only as a synonym for telecasting.

AS per the hook in this essay, it is really difficult to create an interesting hook. In my native language ,we do not actually have this tool, so for me aforementioned hook is meaningful, whereas for you guys is a completely rubbish. I do not like hooks which I found here, as there are so resemble to prompt. Could you please suggest some resources where I can find interesting hooks, I have tried to google it, unfortunately there are only explanation of this Technic not examples.


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