Ielts, Task2 - the critical environmental problems should be worked upon by all countries united

solving Environmental problems

Environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is often believed that environmental problems should be tackled by every country individually while others think these problems should be solved on a worldwide level. In my opinion, there are many environmental problems, and the resolution of the same to be done by some countries, or worldwide depends upon the type and criticality of environmental issue we are dealing with.

On the one hand, many believe that we live on same mother earth, sharing the same atmosphere, so efforts to resolve the issues should be ubiquitous. In other words, though there are some geographical difference but the air, water and land we use are part of same resource, Earth. Take Global Warming or dissertation, for example, these issues are universal and no country is unaffected by this. Therefore, there are some universal environmental problem, and these should be tackled unitedly.

On the other hand, there are some who think that environmental crisis should be tackled by countries rather than whole world. Every country is dealing with their own set of problems so there is no point in getting united to eradicate regional problems. For instance, The United States have been facing the massive wild fire every year from ages but there is no point in uniting against this problem as the problem is confined to only that area and there is nothing significant which any other country can help them with.

In my opinion, putting in united efforts or tackling the problem country wise totally depends upon the type of criticality of environment issue we are dealing with. If we are dealing with a regional problem, which is concentrated to a small region, then it ought to be dealt with in a country. Like the ozone layer hole in Antarctica needs to be taken care by them, as this happened for a small, concentrated region and this issue is not critical at this point in time. Nevertheless, there are global issues like Global Warming and soil erosion which needs to be tackled ubiquitously. Global Warming is very critical and its impact will be world-wide, sparing none, so this issue needs all hands working together in resonance.

In conclusion, though there are varying opinions about the resolution of environmental issues globally or country by country, I believe, the critical problems like Global warming should be worked upon by all countries united and petty regional environmental adversities should be taken care by every country individually.

"and the resolution of the same to be done by ..."

Clear this up what is "the same" referring to?

"many believe that since we live on same mother earth" change

Hernant, you need to learnt he difference in discussion methods for each type of Task 2 essay. This is a 3 paragraph comparative essay discussion. You responded to it in a direct opinion essay manner. This mistake will definitely cause you to fail the essay portion of the test because you changed the prompt requirement and created your own discussion instruction in the opening paraphrase. That is too bad. Your essay has the potential to be graded highly because of the discussion that you presented, if it had only been in the correct format. The correct paraphrase is:

There is an ongoing global discussion as to who should be responsible for solving ecosystem problems. The options being presented are either to have a country deal with the problem individually or, to have a solution developed with the help of several countries. This essay will consider both discussions based on the merit of each discussion before I present my personal opinion regarding this discussion.

There is a lack of proper discussion representation in your paragraphs. Each paragraph must reference the point of view being discussed in order to clearly present the discussion to the reader. You have to say phrases such as "Considering the problem on a global scale..." or "On a national level..." These directional phrases help the reader understand not only which point of view is being discussed, but also who is doing the talking or whose arguments you are considering. These need to reference a public opinion because your personal opinion doesn't come until almost the end of the written essay, in paragraph 4 specifically.

You presented a pretty solid discussion that was only derailed by the improper discussion reference / format. You show an ability to discuss in English, but have some comprehension problems when it comes to understanding the prompt requirements. Don't worry though, I strongly believe that you will be able to conquer that problem soon. Before you write your next practice essay, look for a work sample online. Read several versions in order to familiarize yourself with the discussion topic and how to approach it. That way, when you write your essay, you will have an idea of how you want to answer the essay in an original form instead of an imitated one.

@Holt: can you please suggest what should i do to improve this?

I did few more essays but still its a mixed bag, what should i do improve clarity of thoughts and language.

PS: i tried a lot today but still the same result, i completed ielts video lessons but still no help.