presents empirical evidence on the importance of technology in education
Based on what thesis? What were the discussion topics you believed to be valid? How Was his article developed?
Use the author's last name since he is not a personal acquaintance of yours. show respect for the author.
reported the information of this conference
Based on what theme? How is that relevant to his article/ research paper?
This is an academic paper, do not use contractions, use both words and spell it out.
technology has a very important position
Why? Use supporting evidence and review these critically.
there was a lot of controversy.
Because? Explain the reasons based on changing times.
The presentation is more of an incomplete summary rather than a critical review. In fact, it is too short to be considered one. There are no contradictions, questions, or critical discussions provided in your presentation.