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'cultural homogenization'; Effects of increasing tourism in different countries


troublehappy 1 / -  
Jul 10, 2013   #1
Topic: The costs of international travel are decreasing and tourism is growing. What are the advantages and disadvantages of increasing tourism activity in different countries?

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As the result of globalization, international travel's expense are now declined and tourism activity is now rising. This has become one of the significant issues for every countries, because of its positive and negative effects. The following essay will analyzes the effect of increased tourism activity in the economy, the culture and the nature.

It is argued that international travel brings many benefits for a country. One of the most vivid effect that we can see is the rising of economy. The volume of tourists ascending on many tourist attractions means that the government has to improve the infrastructure and build many attractive places for the tourists. Consequently, the country is more developed and the economy is growing thanks to the money the government invests. Moreover, accelerating tourism activities generates more jobs for the unemployed. Job creations will meet demand of working for many jobless people. Many new restaurants and hotels need employees while more and more tourists come to the country. Therefore, there are many advantages to this trend, which help the growing economy and create jobs.

Besides having a lot of positive effects, increased traveling has some disadvantages for the nature and culture. The most obvious result is cultural homogenization. Tourists bring their own national identity when they visit a country. That's the easiest way for the native people to access the international culture; however, they will be overwhelmed by new lifestyle. The will easily adapt new things and almost forget the old and precious traditions. The second consequence is devastatingly natural destruction. If the government continues to build more infrastructure for the tourism activity, there will be deforestation, overusing pesticides, loss of habitat, and many animals, flora and fauna will be endangered seriously. As a survey conducted by Environmental Bureau, the more buildings are built, the more extinct the animals and forest are. Hence, tourism activity affect negatively to the nature and culture.

All in all, rising traveling activity brings both advantages and disadvantages for a countries. In my opinion, the country is likely be affected negatively if the government still develop the tourism sector. Not only the government but also the people should take action to prevent the cultural erosion and the natural destruction.
shadman19922 21 / 74 10  
Jul 10, 2013   #2
A few mistakes in grammar, but I think the essay is solid content-wise
gmad06 20 / 151 55  
Jul 10, 2013   #3
As the result of globalization, international travel's expense are now declined and tourism activity is now rising.

Some of the major effects caused by globalization include the increase of tourism actvity and decrease of international expense. try to observe parallelism,this sentence could also be further shortened.

This has become one of the significant issues for every countries

this phrase is misleading because previous sentence has two subjects

The following essay will analyzes the effect of increased tourism activity in the economy

The volume of tourists ascending on many tourist attractions means

The ascending volume of visitors on many tourist attractions means

Moreover, accelerating tourism activities generates

accelerating is not the correct word for this..

Overall i have noticed frequent grammar issues,wrong choice of words. Nevertheless,you have good ideas for the essay prompt.
xueweinian 1 / 2  
Jul 10, 2013   #4
" which help the growing economy and create jobs";a little confusing.
"Besides having a lot of positive effects";it is a grammatical mistake.usually ,besides+n or beside+","
"The will easily adapt new things and almost forget the old and precious traditions";the-they
" Hence, tourism activity affect negatively to the nature and culture." adv should be put in front of v,besdies when using "affect" as the meaning of "influence",it is a vt,not a vi.

overall,your content is quite good and your sentence patterns is well stuctured.
yirunli 7 / 17  
Jul 10, 2013   #5
he volume of tourists ascending on many tourist attractions means that the government has to improve the infrastructure and build many attractive places for the tourists. Consequently, the country is more developed and the economy is growing thanks to the money the government invests.

Your idea is great and I love it.
dumi 1 / 6924 1592  
Jul 10, 2013   #6
Asthea result of globalization

As the result of globalization, expenses of international travel'sexpense are now declined and tourism activity is now rising.

... well... it is the technological advancement and not the globalization effects that had caused a decline in transportation costs.

The following essay will analyzesanalyze the effect of increased tourism activity in the economy, the culture and the nature.

... First, I prefer you take this sentence off from the essay as the reader anyway knowing that is what you are going to do in coming paras. Second, even if you keep this line in the essay, you should say what you are going to analyse - you are going to analyse the merits and demerit of increasing tourism!


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