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Hi! I'm currently preparing for IELTS. This is one of my writings for describing a map


stacy422 3 / 4  
Sep 5, 2018   #1

commuting ways to a city hospital



The maps illustrated the difference of the ways to arrive at a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
The most recognizable change is that there used to be no bus station in 2007, but it was constructed over the span of three years. On the other hand, staff and public park were separated in 2010 whereas both of these people were allowed to park at the east side of the Hospital Rd.

In order to establish the bus station, roundabouts were constructed at both ends of the Hospital Road. The Bus Station was located at the west side of the Hospital Road, harnessing the space which was once empty. People can access to the Hospital by bus in 2010.

In addition, the public car park was divided from the staff car park. The public car park was situated beside the building of the City Hospital which was slightly bigger than the staff car park. Therefore, people who drove to the hospital instead of taking the bus, should park at the east side of the main building.

Rogerscup 5 / 8 1  
Sep 5, 2018   #2
Hi, I am not expert in this field, but I will mention something I know.

1. The maps illustrates ...
2. ... at a city hospital in the year 2007 and 2010.
3. The most noticeable change
4. staff and public park were separated ... I am not quite understand here.
You have to do it more clear, and it is important to mention the trend in the overview.
5. ... Hospital Road, harnessing the space..... What is the mean of "harnessing"?


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