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The cycle of hydro-electric power generation classified by two important concepts - IELTS


Hengki Yonathan 4 / 4  
Apr 17, 2016   #1
The cycle of hydro-electric power generation classified by two important concepts, production of electricity using turbine and distribution of electricity to consumer like houses, fabric, and hospitals or schools is demonstrated in the flow diagram. Overall, it can be seen, the two concepts constituted mutual support. In production, there are six stages, including radiation, evaporation, rain, accommodating water in dam, draining water into turbine, and the pump and in distribution electricity who had been produced by turbine will be distributed in 3 stages, in high voltage cables, transformer station, and underground cable before reaching consumer.

Turning into electricity production, sea water is radiated by sun light, then water experiences evaporation to form cloud in the sky. The cloud will produce rain. The water from rain is accommodated by reservoir, built by dam. A valve sees to open or close water into turbine. While the valve opens, the water from dam drains into turbine and produces the electricity. Then water which had used to run the turbine is recycled with pump back to the reservoir and process is repeated.

To distribute the electricity, after electricity production by turbine, use cable which is able to hold the high voltage. The transformer station is to change the high voltage into right voltage of electricity for consumer uses before it distributes. The cable is located in underground to distribute it. However, the electricity will reach the consumers like houses, factories, and hospitals or schools.




Apr 17, 2016   #2
in the flow diagram + bellow
Turning = converting
justivy03 - / 2,367 607  
Apr 18, 2016   #3
HI Rangga, I would like to share additional insights to your analysis.

- generation is classified
- seen,that the two concepts
- constituted a mutual support.
- water in dams ,
- in distribution of electricity
- whothat had been
- produced by turbine, will be
- reaching the consumer.

- water from the rain is
- A valve seesis seen to
- the water from the dam
- Then the water which
- with a pump back
- to the reservoir and the process is repeated.

There you have it Rangga, I believe, the linking verbs that are missing in most of your sentences will complete the idea that you are trying to convey to your readers. I left the last paragraph so you can practice editing it yourself, following the corrections done in the first 2 paragraphs.

I hope this is helpful.


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