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IELTS TASK 2: Daily online purchases for basic necessities have proven its popularity over time


tuyetmai2182004 1 / -  
Oct 31, 2022   #1
buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular.

Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?



Daily online purchases for basic necessities have proven its popularity over time, which has both merits and demerits critically analyzed in this essay.

On the one hand, shopping on websites is time-efficient. A plethora of applications and media provide customers with a boundless range of choices worldwide at a click of a mouse. In addition, online purchases allow for deliveries at a reasonable cost, so there is no need for users to deal with traffic and traveling expenses. Another captivating bright side of e-commerce stores is that people are able to attain an overall impression on the products that they care about based on former users' feedback and reviews, which assists in navigating the purchase towards the right decision. This indicates that shopping on the Internet also saves a fortune due to lower chances of throwaway. Afterwards, going shopping on websites is advantageous.

On the other hand, shopping through e-commerce platforms could exert detrimental impacts on the environment as the demand for shipment would increase followed by packaging. This could result in waste of tonnes of cardboxes, aluminum and, to make it even worse, plastic. Although the process of 3 Rs might be involved to alleviate the amount of the discarded, it still costs more effort and financial loss compared to waste produced by direct purchases. Besides, the convenience of shopping on the Internet comes along with a greater risk of privacy loss. To be more specific, the fact that we could receive instant access to the products that we are interested in on almost any website derives from trading of users' information. Consequently, the thriving e-commerce business brings about considerable drawbacks.

To sum up, the phenomenon is a two-bladed sword. If customers are to benefit, they should make the most use of the upsides and support the environmentally-conscious retailers in order to lighten the negative influences.
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Oct 31, 2022   #2
The writer has not responded properly to the question. There is a single opinion that must be defended in this representation in relation to the direct question provided in the prompt. That qestion is:

DO THE ADVANTAGES OF SHOPPING IN THIS WAY OUTWEIGH THE DISADVANTAGES?

Seeing the format of the question, it does not lend itself to a comparison discussion that shows the merits and demerits of both sides. Rather, the writer must indicate a support for one clear opinion. Without that clear opinion in support of one of the two sides, the essay will be scored based on a lack of clear opinion in relation to the given question. There was no "compare both sides" part of the instruction for the discussion to merit even a partial scoring consideration.

In terms of task response and relevance, the essay has failed. That lack of proper representation as is relevant to the question means that no matter how well he believes he has discussed the topic, his prompt deviation and lack of relevant response will lead to a final failing score. That is regardless of his performance in the scoring sections.

The correct response is: The merits ( or demerit depending on the writer's choice) of this shopping method outweighs the merits/ demerits (writer's choice) based on 2 reasons. First, (Indicate Reason 1). Second, (Indicate reason 2).


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