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Is damaged tropical rainforest caused by Logging industry?


PHA2016 39 / 62 4  
Sep 13, 2016   #1
Now days, logging industry had supplied several impact to environment damage. Some areas felt habitat loss, pollution and climate change along countries in Central Africa, Southeast Asia, and South America to northern forest of Canada and Scandinavia. And also Logging activity had caused damage both terrestrial and aquatic habitat in the forest. It can be seen, deforestation contributed pollution in the world. All habitat in forest will be getting bad impact too such us algae growth, removing oxygen that finally will be killing fish and other wildlife. Forest especially the tropical rainfall forest will be contribute to natural resource and biodiversity exist. Responsible logging activity will be guaranty in our nature and habitat still a life.

rosadesiana 38 / 40 2  
Sep 14, 2016   #2
Hi PHA2016,
here is my suggestions for you, keep writing !

Now days, logging industry had supplied .....
==> nowadays , logging industry ....

Some areas felt habitat loss, pollution and climate change ...
==> The affected impact areas causes of pollution and climate change are Central Africa, Southeast Asia .....

And also Logging activity had caused damage both terrestrial and ...
==>The logging activities also had caused damages both of ......

removing oxygen that finally will be killing fish and other wildlife.
==> will kill the fishes

Forest especially the tropical rainfall forest will be contribute ...
==>The forests will entirely contribute to the natural resource and biodiversity, especially the rainfall forest.
dils 20 / 33 2  
Sep 14, 2016   #3
Hi PHA2016,
Let me give my personal suggestion about your writing.
1. Now days, logging industry had supplied several ...
• Now days refer to present condition and had supplied refer to past condition, make sure that you use the correct tenses, it depends on what the idea that you want to tell to the readers.

• Several impact - several impacts.
2. "Some areas felt habitat loss, pollution and climate ..." - Some are along countries in Central Africa .... felt habitat loss, pollution and climate change.

3. "And also Logging activity" - Logging activity also.
4. "both terrestrial and aquatic..." - both in terrestrial and aquatic.
5. "All habitat in forest will be getting bad impact too". It will be better to modify this sentence.
6. "Forest especially the tropical rainfall forest will be contribute to natural resource"
7. "Responsible logging activity will be guaranty in our nature and habitat still a life". Maybe you better try to use other words to describe the condition that you mean to be.

Keep writing.
swr10 10 / 16 2  
Sep 14, 2016   #4
Now days --> Lately , logging industry had supplied ...

And also --> In addition , logging activity had also caused damage both ...
It can be seen that deforestation contributed ...

... bad impact too such us algae growth, meanwhile removing oxygen that ...

Forest, especially the tropical rainfall forest will be ...

Responsible logging activity will be guaranty sustainability nature and habitat still a life.

Keep writing!!
Best regards.
Ifan21 22 / 24 2  
Sep 14, 2016   #5
Hello PHA,
It's incredible simple text, these following correction for your writing :
Now days (Nowadays or at present ), logging industry had supplied several impact (impacts ) to environment damage. Some areas felt habitat loss (Lost habitat ), pollution and climate ...

All habitat in forest will be getting bad impact too such us (especially ) algae growth, removing oxygen that finally will be killing fish ...
Responsible logging activity will be guaranty in our nature ...

additionally use variation appropriate grammars


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