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Data on Australia exports to four regions: Japan, US, China, and India, over the period of 22 years


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Nov 11, 2021   #1

Australian exports numbers to four countries from 1990 to 2012



The graph depicts how many percentages of Australia exports to 4 different regions: Japan, US, China and India over a period of 22 years (1990 - 2012).

Overall, there were upward trends in the proportion of Australian exports to China and India while the opposite was true for the other categories over the given period. Besides, China easily outnumbered all other figures during this time.

In 1990, China and India received the ratio of Australian exports bottomed at just under 5% until the 2000s. Previously, this ratio of India hovered around the level of only about 1%. From 2000 to 2010, it increased significantly by about 6% before hitting a slight drop from 7% to 5% in 2012. During the same period, the percentages of Australian commodities exported to China witnessed a surge and overtook the figure of Japan in 2007 to become the largest market that obtained all of the exported goods with 28% in 2012.

Regarding the other two countries, a gradual decline of about 10% was seen in the portion of Australian exports to Japan between 1990 and 2012. Meanwhile, this percentage of the US entered a two-decade period of instability when reached the highest point at 12% in 2000 and fell to the lowest point of only a mere 5% in 2010.



Holt  Educational Consultant - / 12,000 3875  
Nov 12, 2021   #2
The graph depicts how many percentages of Australia exports to 4 different regions

This is a confusing statement as there are no categories enumerated in the line graph. Percentage points we indicated instead and it is this reference that should be made in your sentence as a reference point. A clearer reference would have been:

The line graph depicts the highs and lows of Australian exports to 4 countries. The countries that are part of the graph measurement are ...

other categories

Again, no categories listed. You will lose points when the accuracy of your report is considered. Why? You are referring to non existent information. If the data cannot be found in the image, you lose points for it in 3 scoring sections.

China and India received the ratio of Australian exports bottomed at just under 5% until the 2000s

I am not sure what you are trying to say here. It seems like you are just making up references as you go along. Are you sure that you understand what the task is about?


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