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These days, many people are trying to learn English, approximately 2 billions of students


andika08 81 / 80 16  
Nov 15, 2016   #1
TED Summary : English Mania

The is an interesting topic about mania. In this day, many people trying to learn english. The number of people started to study this from approximately 2 billions of them. The most mania english came from China. Many people in this world choose english language as it can get opportunity for better life and job. All in all, English became the global conversation for solving problem such as Global climate, hunger and disease.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 13,033 4247  
Nov 15, 2016   #2
Andika, when you write a summary, don't forget to present a proper summary of the discussion. For example, in this essay, you should have presented an explanation regarding the topic, which is Mania, how it started, where it has spread, and sufficient reasons as to explain why English is a mania that shows no signs of stopping. Your opening sentence does not really inform the reader about anything. Actually, the sentence makes it sound like you are starting the essay at the middle instead of at a proper start point that offered some information about the forthcoming summary. There are no supporting statements regarding the reason why English became the global language either. So this summary is definitely going to have problems when it comes to scoring it for content, relevance, cohesion, and grammar. You need to practice note taking in a better manner in order to properly summarize video reports.
Bams17 28 / 43  
Nov 15, 2016   #3
I WAS WODERING WHO IS THE SPEAKER ??

The is an interesting topic about mania. ( CONFUSING SENTENCE) In this day TODAY/RIGHT NOW/ NOWADAYS, many people trying to learn english (NEED VERB).

IT SHOWS THAT YOU REALLY NEED TO REVISE YOUR WRITING AND GIVE THE CONJUNCTION TO MAKE FLOW YOUR WRITING.

KEEP SPIRIT!


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