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Now a days technologies have became a very important aspect of everybodys lives!


gangadhar 3 / 3  
Jun 16, 2013   #1
Now a days technologies have became a very important aspect of everybodys lives. These are the things we are using in our day today life like cell phones,computers,laptops. Some belive that with the help of technologies students now a days can learn more information and learn it more quickly; others would disagree. In my view with the help of technology students can learn more information and learn it more quickly for two important reasons.

The most important reason is that information is easily accessible from anywhere and anytime. By using laptops with internet connection user can send emails easily and quickly. Also he can view the live telecast of cricket matches from any part of the world. He can also download movies,music and audio files with fast downoad speed. For example, in old days students have to do their college assignments in laboartory because there were no perconnal computers and internet connections. Thay have to attend every lecture and practical. Now with the adavncement of technology students can do their practical asignments from cyber cafe or from laptop. They can send the completed assignments through email to professor. they can also attend the online lectures of professor from home without attending college or school. Sometimes they can also download pdf file format books from internet without having to pay money. It saves lot of time to go school and they will not be tired by travelling. It made their life simple. As you can see with the advancement of internet students can easily send and receive information.

Another reason is it makes they complicated things in more understandable. Sometimes students not understand the lecture of professor in class because he taught from books without any slide shows. But if he taught with some pictures or images then this visual appearance will give better idea of the lecture. It makes their life simple. For example I remember my last years biology class experience. professor was teaching us how how body structure is and how all parts work. He was teaching the definitions. But only few students understood it. it became too complicated to understand. Most of the students compalined about the lecture. Next time professor made some slides on computer and teaches the flow. This visual appearance gave us the clear picture of internal body structure of human beings. Even today also i remeber those images. So this experience taught me that with the help of advance technology lide slides from computer software gave students the better idea of the lecture.

In sum, even though som e may disagree that with the help of technology students are ditracted.Not only it makes information accessible easily but also make complicated things in more understandable ways. I think every scool schould adept the technologies so improve the performance of the students.
jkjeremy - / 380 72  
Jun 16, 2013   #2
You could have said all of this in about 300 words (probably fewer).
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Jun 28, 2013   #3
Now a days technologies have became a very important aspect of everybodys lives. These are the things we are using in our day today life like cell phones,computers,laptops. Some belive that with the help of technologies students now a days can learn more information and learn it more quickly; others would disagree. In my view with the help of technology students can learn more information and learn it more quickly for two important reasons.

There is lot of repetition here and some ideas are expressedvabruptly. For example;

These are the things we are using in our day today life like cell phones,computers,laptops.

....why they are so popular? What do they offer to our lives?
Also,

Some belive that with the help of technologies students now a days can learn more information and learn it more quickly

You access information and not learn information.
IntheClouds - / 8  
Jun 28, 2013   #4
Now a daysNowadaysThese days technologies have became a very important aspect of everybodyseverybody's lives.

"Now a days" should be spelled "nowadays," but is a word that is no longer used frequently by native speakers of English. "These days" sounds more natural to a native speaker. "Everybody's" takes a possesive form rather than a plural form, and therefore an apostrophe is needed.

These are the things we are using in our day todayto daylifelives like cell phones,computers,laptops.

Some belivebelieve that with the help of technologies students now a days can learn more information and learn it more quickly; others would disagree.

The term "nowadays" is redundant and unnecessary. Also, I would like to clarify the difference between "learning" information and "accessing" information. When you learn a piece of information you are taking a piece of information and commiting it to memory. When you are accessing information you are retrieving a piece of information. This means you may be viewing this information on a screen or you may be retrieving it from a memory of a piece of information that you have already learned. Judging from the context of what you wrote, I suspect that your usage of the term "learn" is correct.

By using laptops with internet connectionconnectionsuserusers can send emails easily and quickly.

Also he canThey can also[/b ]view the live telecast [b]live telecasts of cricket matches from any part of the world. HeThey can also download movies, music and audio files with fast downoad speed.

I changed "the live telecast" to "live telecasts" because I assume there is more than one telecast. I am however not familiar with sports. If there is in fact only one telecast, then you should keep the phrase as you originally wrote it.

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Now with the adavncementadvancement of technology students can do their practical asignments from cyber cafecafes or from laptoplaptops.

They can send the completed assignments through email to the professor. theyThey can also attend the online lectures of the professor from home without attending college or school campus. Sometimes they can also download pdf file format books from the internet without having to pay money. It saves lot of time to go schoolGoing to school online saves a lot of time and theystudents will not be tired byfrom travelling. It mademakes their life simple.


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