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It has been 2 decades since Canadian government happily admits immigrants


Abrahamlincoln 54 / 56  
Nov 10, 2016   #1
Article Summary - Liberty moves north

It has been 2 decades since Canadian government happily admits immigrants. Even there are has been a proliferation of refugees more than 300,000 people a year, it is a trigger to welcomed more asylum-seekers which have reached 1% of its total population. It is a higher proportion than any other big, rich countries such America or Britain.

There are two predominant reasons supporting Canadian's successful. Firstly, they not only invite them to come but helping them find employment and housing. They believe that "multicultural heritage" is beneficial aspects of creating prosperity and peaceful. Not every country is able to follow what Canada does since it pertains to a security system. Secondly, educate citizens to understand a financial issue. Canada has been managing its public finances conservatively and its prime minister has created a regulation to give a tax cut to the middle level and attain more and increased the higher tax to help for it.
RAY93 35 / 186 136  
Nov 10, 2016   #2
It has been 2 decades since Canadian government happily admits immigrants. Even there are has been [DOUBLE VERB] a proliferation of refugees (...) asylum-seekers whichhave reached 1% of its total population. It is a higher proportion than any ... STILL TO SIMILAR WITH THE SOURCE. HERE I COPIED FROM THE LINK YOU ATTACHED: It happily admits more than 300,000 immigrants a year, nearly 1% of its population-a ...SEE.. TOO SIMILAR RIGHT? NEED TO MORE PARAPHRASE!bear on your mind that paraphrasing is not a simple work. you should understand first what you read and not just rearrange or change the structure or change the verb.

Firstly, they not only invite them[this refer to whom???] to come but helping them find employment JOB and housing. They[AGAIN, 'THEY' REFER TOO???]believe that "multicultural heritage" is beneficial aspects [SINGULAR/PLURAL ISSUE] of creating prosperity and peaceful. ......

Overall, it clear that you need to learn again how to make a summary and paraphrase well. avoid plagiarism by uploading what you say as your summary when actually you just picked up some information and rearrange it into a much shorter version.


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