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You have decided to resign from your work in order to try a new field.


Jimmy879873 26 / 55 13  
Nov 7, 2017   #1
You have decided to resign from your work in order to try a new field.
Write a letter of resignation to your boss. In your letter:

-Tell your boss of your decision and explain why you are leaving
- Explain what you have learnt from your current job and how you feel about leaving
- Ask for a letter of reference


letter of resignation



Dear Mr. Doe,

Thank you for being extraordinarily supportive since the first day I started working in this company. You and the company have equipped me with practical knowledge in all these years. You are also my lifelong mentor as you always guide me to be a better person. I am approaching you today because, after five years of working in the same company, I desire a new environment to explore the unknown.

Looking it back these five years, the work has taught me so much that I could ever imagine. Such as many crucial business strategies that make me become a better decision maker or in dealing with different characteristic clients. However, my deepest sadness cannot be described by words as I have to leave my lifelong mentor as well as all of my colleagues.

I understand our company policy to its letter of recommendation is merely restricted to include the confirmation of its job title and date of its employment. Thus, I hope you could write me a personal reference regarding my work performance. As it is absolutely helpful to increase my prospects of pursuing my next career goal.

It is a great hope that you would accept my resignation and write me a letter of reference. As always, I look forward to your reply.

All the best,

CJ

Words: 221

Thanks!

TJLuschen - / 241 203  
Nov 7, 2017   #2
At first I thought you had forgotten a main point of the prompt by not including the reason for your departure. Now I see that you did include one, but it seems very vague. I would suggest giving a bit more detail as to how you will "explore the unknown" Your writing sounds very natural; I enjoyed your letter, but you do have a few errors including some sentence fragments. Here are some specific suggestions:

Looking it back at these five years,

has taught me so much more than I could ever imagine {or "so much that I could never have imagined"}

ever imagine, such as {"Such as ... clients" is not a complete sentence on its own}

that make me become a better decision {or "that have made me become a better"}

maker or assist in dealing with different {your "or" did not have a parallel structure}

different characteristic clients {this is vague to me - do you mean "different types of clients"?}

company policy that its letter of recommendation

work performance, as it is {"As it is ...career goal." is not a complete sentence}
anitaho577 1 / 1  
Nov 7, 2017   #3
Overall, it was a great letter, I think @TJLuschen made a lot of good points.
Good job.
Holt - / 7,527 2001  
Nov 7, 2017   #4
SG, I have a different opinion on your letter. I read your letter a number of times and I made a different observation of your work. It is my opinion that you delivered all of the aspects of the prompt requirements. In any resignation letter, a reason for your resignation is not required of the resignee. Only the irrevocable intention to resign is what you have to indicate. The reasons for doing so may or may not be indicated because that is, in real life, an optional part of the essay. The intention to explore the unknown is an acceptable "personal" reason for your resignation. Your overall letter delivers on the requirements in a direct manner. In a resignation letter, you only need to state the facts which you did in this version of your letter.

Again, this is just my analysis of your work on this letter. I have found that you have done a better job of delivering on the requirements of this essay than on your previous document writing exercises. You showed a clear understanding of the prompt and an appropriate level of writing for a resignation letter. This is a document that you can be proud of having written. It is a good start and shows that you have improved your skills while also indicating room for further improvement as you go about your practice tests. I do not doubt that you will be better prepared to take the test when you finally decide to take it.


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