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In democracy the media can be controlled in terms of avoiding misrepresentation of information


miri 2 / 7  
Jan 14, 2014   #1
Topic: Whoever controls the media also controls opinions and attitudes of the people and there is little can be done to rectify this.
Task: To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Essay:
It is suggested that, whoever controls the media manipulates with options and decisions of the people and it is very hard to change this. I agree with this because I believe the main purpose of media is influencing people thought in profitable way for some instance like government or other political organizations.

On the one hand, I accept that regulation authorities can be established in order to control information flow and restrict distorted information which can influence people on behalf of one's benefit. In many countries, for example, there is an organization which does this work and can penalize TV channels for their misbehave. Existence of such kind of organization is expected to keep back information presenters from giving wrong information or trying to influence people decisions.

At the same time, I believe that in most countries, particularly in those where democracy is only artificial the media is one of important items to manipulate with people for the sake of government's benefits. So, as it is a case even having some control organizations can't restrict the misrepresentation of information. For example, in Russian TV news you often can see the information related to government interests is distorted. Another example of controlling of crowd via media can be Turkey. The Turkish government successfully uses the media to keep people busy in simple issues giving not much time them to participate in political life of country.

To sum up, it is true that the media can be controlled in terms of avoiding misrepresentation of information, but in my opinion it is possible only developed countries where the democracy is highly valued.
OP miri 2 / 7  
Jan 14, 2014   #2
Thank you very much for your advices. As I understand, from point of your view in this kind of essays (to what extent) I need to expand only the point which I'm agreeing or disagree and why? Is it right?
Shahoo 3 / 5  
Jan 14, 2014   #3
i think u did a great job :)
znack 7 / 31 5  
Jan 14, 2014   #4
Hi

Whoever controls the media also controls opinions and attitudes of the people and there is little can be done to rectify this.

First pay attention toward detail in a topic. It is really important to mention how much can be done
As well as it is imperative to have the first paragraph for controlling of opinions and the second for attitudes
It is good to write a background that in some cultures the government controls the media while in others rich people do it.

To what extend do you agree or disagree?

It is quite easy,you should write how far you agree or disagree with this statement, for example, I strongly(partially) agree that ...blah,blah,blah(and explain why)

It is suggested that , whoever controls the media manipulates with options and decisions of the people and it is very hard to change this

Start with a hook as recommend Dumi,after paraphrase the topic.
Who is suggested it?It should be it is believed.

It is suggested that, whoever controls the media manipulates with options and decisions of the people and it is very hard to change this. I agree with this because I believe the main purpose of the media is the influencing of people thought in profitable way for some instance like government or other political organizations.
On the one hand, I accept that regulation authorities can be established in order to control information flow and restrict distorted information which can influence people on behalf of one's benefit.i could not understand the meaning of this sentence In many countries, for example, there is an organization which does this work and can penalizes TV channels for their misbehavewrong word . Existence of such kind of organization is expected to keep back information presenters from giving wrong information or trying to influence people decisions.In the last sentence clearly answer to question,without mention personal pronounces,like ,From this it can be seen that this type of organisations has controlled media resources in a best way so ordinary people may help little to improve the current situation.
At the same time, I believe that in most countries, particularly in those where democracy is only artificial the media is one of important items to manipulate with people for the sake of government's benefitsexpress your opinion in introduction and paraphrase in conclusion,do not put it in paragraphs . So, as it is a case even having some control organizations can't restrict the misrepresentation of information. For example, in Russian TV news you often can see the information related to the government interests is distorted. Another example of controlling of crowd via media can be Turkey. The Turkish government successfully uses the media to keep people busy in simple issues giving not much time them to participate in political life of country.Do not use many examples in one paragraph, t is better to have a conclusion for each para, as aforementioned before
To sum up, it is true that the media can be controlled in terms of avoiding misrepresentation of informationthere is the question about the possibility to change it, so you can say for example,that it is impossible , but in my opinion it is possible only in developed countries where the democracy is highly valued.

Good luck
OP miri 2 / 7  
Jan 14, 2014   #5
Wow, so much corrections. Thank you very much for your contribution.
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Jan 16, 2014   #6
Thank you very much for your advices. As I understand, from point of your view in this kind of essays (to what extent) I need to expand only the point which I'm agreeing or disagree and why? Is it right?

In the introduction, just mentioning your position is quite enough. If you have time, then you can mention the reasons for your opinion very briefly in the intro ( it's ok even without it)

Then in the body paragraphs, give one reason ( point) per body para to justify your opinion. Support them with a good example.


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